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doing exercise is more needed for older people than younger people

Due to the benefits associated with exercise, some people claim that younger people need more exercise than older people. In general, people say younger people need more exercise than older people because younger people are in physically growing stage of life. However, I strongly agree with the statement. I believe older people need more exercise because]the seniors need exercise to prevent any illness and they can develop their sociality by exercising with other people.

Firstly, the seniors can improve their physical strength through exercise. In the case of younger people, they often have enough energy and power to do their daily works and studies. On the other hand, aged people do not have enough physical strength so they feel tired more often. the exercise can help the situation. So, older people need more exercise. For example, there was a survey conducted for 500 people who are above sixties by a group of health management major. The goal of the survey was to know about respondents’ physical conditions. 89% of respondents claimed that they do not have enough physical strength so they feel tired in daily life. After having 4 weeks of regular exercise, they feel more strength in their bodies. This explains when older people exercise, this will surely help them to gain strength in their bodies.

Secondly, older people will have more opportunities to become social through the exercise. younger people can talk and communicate often with their friends and colleagues in the school and their workplaces. However, many retired older people do not have many chances to meet and communicate with others. So, they can feel lonely easily. Obviously, exercise can help these situations. If they talk a walk or play their favorite sports, it is possible that they can meet other people and they can talk each other. This can make them feel less lonely. I have a personal experience. When I was a middle school student, I played tennis in the park. At that time, I met with an old man. He told me that he always felt lonely before playing tennis and staied at home but he feels much better by playing tennis with me because he can throw away feeling of lonley by talking and interact with me. This proves that exercises can treat lonely that most old people feel.

In conclusion, I believe exercises will help people in any age. However, having exercise can benefit more older people because it will give more physical strength to older people and they can also enjoy talking to each other when they play sports.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... older people need more exercise because]the seniors need exercise to prevent any...
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Suggestion: The
...strength so they feel tired more often. the exercise can help the situation. So, ol...
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...portunities to become social through the exercise. younger people can talk and c...
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Suggestion: Younger
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...al through the exercise. younger people can talk and communicate often with thei...
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Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put before the verb 'communicate'.
Suggestion: often communicate
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, in conclusion, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93457943925 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34832495594 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446261682243 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.356028492 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.4285714286 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2857142857 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450941289605 0.236089414692 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141321272627 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166804667363 0.0737576698707 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.346893292528 0.150856017488 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.172330692579 0.0645574589148 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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