Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.
Why do you think this is the case?
What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?
(Write and Improve)
Nowadays, the booming of advanced science and technology allows people to connect with each others easier through social media and instant message applications. As a result, a large part of adolescents choose to socialise online instead of meeting others in person. Beautify applications and the global availability can be considered as reasons for this trend, while building neighborhood community and educate the youth the true value of beauty can ease the situation.
It is noticeable that several reasons can lead to the fact that more young people prefer spening time online to hanging out with others. First, the availability of online network facilitate the way they socilise globally. For example, users of any social networks can connect with others living in different continents in just seconds. In addition, with the magic of beautify applications, people appear to be more beautiful and attractive when they connect with each other online. Many current trending applications allow utilisers to erase wrinkles, smoothen and brighten the skin, or even change facial and body struture perfectly like famous model.
Although there are many reasons for the increase of online socialising, several measures can be implemented to encourage people meet others offline. To start with, building more community in residential area. Moreover, teaching teenagers to aware of their true beauty and value can be another solution. Once the youth knows that their value come from what they can contribute to the society, and the beauty is just subjective field, there is no certain standard for exterior beauty, they will consider going outside, connecting with others and dedicate their own value is much valuable than just stay at home and connect with others online.
In conclusion, online socilising have engaged greatly in young people's lives that makes them less interest in meeting other citizens in real person. However, some measure could be accomplished to encourage the youth to go out and communicate in person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3880126183 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66610974823 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583596214511 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.3640121292 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156516970923 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650592299982 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579256401983 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108354435788 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406484520916 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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