Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is true that some people believe that children should be urged to foster a competitive spirit rather than collaborate with others. While some people argue that cooperation with peers is useful for children, I would argue that children having encouragement to adopt a sense of competition is much more crucial.
On the one hand, mixing with mates could help develop and hone toddlers’ skills by acquiring practical knowledge in shared activities. They could gain experience with precious lessons from others’ mistakes throughout the whole process working together. Therefore, they would apply all the valuable things they acquire to themselves and find it easier to achieve the same initial target. Playing in a football team together, for example, requires strong bonds between teammates in order to win the game.
On the other hand, competitive spirit does not mean owning a merciless or ruthless attitude. Instead, young generations can boost their productivity and reach full potential if they fully comprehend this whole ideal. By creating a challenging environment, children get a chance to work harder through spending time practicing so as to outperform their opponents. Hence, they can adopt a sense of satisfaction and achievement when reaching the goal. Usaint Bolt, for instance, a famous athlete, has trained himself for 5 years before setting a world’s record of racing.
In conclusion, both possessing a competitive and learning spirit are crucial, but it is more beneficial for children to be ambitious under a challenging environment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 327, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...harder through spending time practicing so as to outperform their opponents. Hence, they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1324.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 243.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44855967078 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91488775851 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.695473251029 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.3874148612 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 110.333333333 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211296532687 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725095362418 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0965512115898 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143038965993 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126404523881 0.056905535591 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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