Technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, there are many technology devices have changed children spend their leisure time. This essay will examine both sides of the arguments before conclusion is drawn.
Admittedly, there are some arguments in favor of technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. First, by using technological devices such as mobile phones and tablets, people, especially younger, are now able to keep in touch with their family members and research information over the world when they have free time wherever regardless of geographical distance. This technologies for free time support, presumably, tends not only to increase the overall young people know more about information of lower-income people and have many ways to improve their study or work when they use technology in their free time but also to mitigate their feeling of inferiority, which eventually promotes and egalitarian society. Second, use technology in free time of young people would probably result in a greater supply of highly qualified workers, which benefits society in the long run. In fact, it is acknowledged that skilled and knowledgeable human capital is imperative to foster economic growth and technological development in any nations.
Nevertheless, the resultant problems would be far more significant than the minor benefits once children use technology in their free time. First, all children used technology devices would likely correspond with a tremendous focus on study strain on a country. Children always focusing on Internet and video games in their free time could become over-reliant on the Internet for study, meaning that there would be less input do develop important areas such as healthcare system and transport infrastructure. Second, technology for free time would tempt many young people including those who are not academically inclined or show no interest in study pursuits, thereby adding great burdens for university admissions and government staff and spent pursuing more suitable activities paths. It,instead, would be a more technology viable option if the resources focused Ed on supporting study and doing homework.
In conclusion, this argument had many advantages but in my perspective this argument had more disadvantages outweigh advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56936416185 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91674633826 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589595375723 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.8384318935 49.4020404114 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.230769231 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6153846154 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39202236801 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152172092679 0.084324248473 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133097737631 0.0667982634062 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216526082517 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088683409711 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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