Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays, technology is one of the most developing side in our society. The development of technology lead to many of inventions such as: television, computer, smartphone… It have both sides pros and cons. Personally, the disadvantage seem to be more than the advantage. For example, children are more likely to focus on their smartphones. In my opinion, this can bring a lot of disadvantage for the children who keen on the technology’s product.
I think the more developing, the more problem. In other words, the using of smartphones can decide your personality. For example, if you stay at home all day to keep your eyes on smartphone, you will become narrow-minded and don’t want to communicate with society. Conversely, you will be open- minded, active and happy more than the one who using a lot of smartphone. Children can also get much of disease about their eyes and their mental health. With their unknowledge, the children can contact with many of bad contents which relate directly to their future.
On the other hand, the using smartphones also bring many benefits. Children can gain masses of knowledge which they have difficulty in school. Smartphone can get rid of the distance between people and people, children actually contact with many of cultural from many different country. With smartphone, children can become independent, they can do-it-self with only smartphone. It mean that if they have difficulty to do something, they fully can search it on a web to find the way to deal with their problem and doesn’t need parent’s helps.
We can take advantage of smartphone to educate children better. Smartphone not bad but not good fully, they are only bad if we permit children using more and more without our management. I believe in the future, children will have prospect of developing more and more if they use in a good way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, conversely, if, so, for example, i think, such as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99678456592 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88734880443 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511254019293 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3732355816 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7894736842 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3684210526 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176493645965 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587275728094 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0258169161809 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110824719507 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236320888251 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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