Some people think children should have unlimited access to the internet. Others believe parents should supervise their children’s use of the internet. Which do you believe?
The internet has become one of the most important tools in people’s daily lives, including children. Regarding this, some people believe that children should have unlimited access to the internet. However, I personally think that children should have their parents supervising them while using the internet for two reasons: better health, and more understanding.
First and foremost, children’s health will improve if parents control their access to the internet. To be specific, by limiting their access to the internet, children will not only reduce their eyesight get worse due to their smartphone or computer, but also have more time doing other activities that will help them, such as doing their homework, or playing baseball with their friends. For example, my brother once used an excessive amount of time on the internet. His eyesight was bad, and he also had too little time for other activities. As a result, my mother had to control him by supervising what he was doing on the internet. It turned out that his eyesight became better as he used less smartphone, and his grades increased significantly. This clearly shows that children’s health will get better if parents keep in check with their children on the internet.
In addition, children and parents will understand each other more. In detail, by communicating with each other while parents supervise their children, each other will have an opportunity to talk to each other, resulting in a more understanding environment. An observational study held in 2019 at Boston university compared two groups of families: one who controlled their children accessing the internet, and one who did not. The results showed that there was 62% more communication between parents and children. This undoubtedly proves that if parents supervise their children, there will be more communication, resulting in a more understanding family.
Admittedly, some could argue that there will be less conflict, and children can readily obtain information if parents don’t have an eye on their children. However, as children’s health increases and more understanding will occur if parents limit their children, I personally state that children should have their parents watch them for excessive amounts of time on the internet.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, while, for example, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 22.412803532 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1373.03311258 141% => OK
No of words: 359.0 270.72406181 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37883008357 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87169472833 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487465181058 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 419.366225166 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.51434878587 462% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8953237499 49.2860985944 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.588235294 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1176470588 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 7.06452816374 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489521158098 0.272083759551 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187969149301 0.0996497079465 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128571663865 0.0662205650399 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.355545756728 0.162205337803 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130910095654 0.0443174109184 295% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, while, for example, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 22.412803532 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1373.03311258 141% => OK
No of words: 359.0 270.72406181 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37883008357 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87169472833 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487465181058 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 419.366225166 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.51434878587 462% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8953237499 49.2860985944 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.588235294 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1176470588 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 7.06452816374 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489521158098 0.272083759551 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187969149301 0.0996497079465 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128571663865 0.0662205650399 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.355545756728 0.162205337803 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130910095654 0.0443174109184 295% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.