The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The world as we know it, has become extremely complex and sophisticated leaving no room for errors. As science and technology advances, the younger generation is forced to cope with the exponential growth and simultaneously learn new technical abilities. Nowadays, success is when your contribution to society to improve as a whole is more, you are more likely to earn more than others. The prompt wishes to edify this idea that younger generations must cooperate coalesced to grow rather than compete with one another. I strongly disagree with this prompt and I have two reasons why, although I do concede with the prompt in some cases.
First of all, as the world is getting more competitive the weak get weaker and the strong get stronger. This has been the primary foundation on which life on earth has been extant. For example, let us consider the open hunting grounds of Africa's desert, the lions wait almost two weeks to catch one buffalo for their momentary meal. If the lions fail to capture their prey, they are prone to starvation and ultimately this leads to fatality. On the other hand, things are similar for the buffalo or any other prey group as well, the herd needs water to quench in the hot deserted land. Water resources are scant across Africa and only a handful of places thrive with water. The herd is forced to cross the lions hunting ground in order to reach its destination. There are high possibilities that they fall prey to their higher predators. The lions target the young and weak for an easier meal. This type of situation is almost omnipresent across the world and applies to every aspect of life. The younger generation must compete with one another in order to assess and improve which fundamentals they are weak in, or they get left behind.
In addition to that, the world right now as we know it is very cruel. It doesn't have soft spots for people who are unable to catch up to the world's pace. Every employer and every employee is trying to satisfy the hierarchy chain. If you can't compete with your colleagues then you won't be forced to improve your skillset. You have to constantly put yourself in a field outside your comfort zone in order to improve. This can be understood with an easy example, let us assume that you are to learn a new language like German, all your friends know german and you are unable to comprehend their discussion because you are yet to learn the language. In order to develop social inclusion you must force yourself and put effort to learn German. If you fail to do so, you are prone to be left behind in conversations, leaving you feeling lost or disconnected. So I feel it is necessary to compete with your colleagues in order to improve.
Having said all this, there are some cases where co-operation among the young generation is fruitful. This can be understood with an example, if I were to learn a new programming language, instead of a learning competition with my friend if I learn the language together, then our negatives can be identified and pointed out by another quicker than if I were to learn the language myself. In situations like these copoperation among the youth is very helpful. The efficiency at which they can learn new things is rapidly increased.
To conclude, the weaker youth get left behind in this modern yet cruel world, they are forced to learn new things only by competing with one another in hope to flourish their skillset. Everyone in the world are trying to push boundaries to keep development existing. If you are not useful in todays employee market, then they pose no reason to hire you. However, there are cases where you have to co-operate with your friends or work-mates for constant and more efficient way of improving.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ght now as we know it is very cruel. It doesnt have soft spots for people who are unab...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... trying to satisfy the hierarchy chain. If you cant compete with your colleagues t...
^^
Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... to satisfy the hierarchy chain. If you cant compete with your colleagues then you w...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, well, for example, i feel, in addition, first of all, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 33.0505617978 206% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 95.0 58.6224719101 162% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3093.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 654.0 442.535393258 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72935779817 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05701727356 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53478682626 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 307.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469418960245 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 956.7 704.065955056 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7759540088 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7272727273 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166931020944 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423112972143 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403749795503 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0905801214067 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375055186979 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ght now as we know it is very cruel. It doesnt have soft spots for people who are unab...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... trying to satisfy the hierarchy chain. If you cant compete with your colleagues t...
^^
Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... to satisfy the hierarchy chain. If you cant compete with your colleagues then you w...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, well, for example, i feel, in addition, first of all, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 33.0505617978 206% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 95.0 58.6224719101 162% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3093.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 654.0 442.535393258 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72935779817 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05701727356 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53478682626 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 307.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469418960245 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 956.7 704.065955056 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7759540088 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7272727273 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166931020944 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423112972143 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403749795503 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0905801214067 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375055186979 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.