Some people think it is more important for the government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Opinions are divided on whether public money is spent on preventing diseases or treating inhabitants who are already suffering from them by the government. Although promoting balanced habits so as to reduce illnesses is an essential manner, I completely disagree with this view.
It is crucial for the government to pay attention to raising public money on preventing illnesses through investing in sporting infrastructure and sessions training. With regard to the former, these public facilities encourage residents particularly in urban areas to join in outdoor exercise on a daily basis. Consequently, physical activities can boost their immune system and prevent various chronic diseases such as high blood pressure, diabetes and obesity. In addition, if the governments contribute more money on session training, they can raise the awareness of inhabitants about the importance of staying healthy and give them the right way to do exercise everyday.
On the other hand, spending public money on the treatment of citizens who are already ill is extremely essential. First of all, these patients also pay money for the welfare state before they suffer from illnesses so it is logical that they can receive the health services. For example, if VietNamese person pays $100 yearly for health insurance, he will get free medicine and a 50% fee for surgery in public hospitals. The other reason is that plenty of diseases including bacteria infection, SAR and COVID19 can spread into the community from the patients who are not treated in health centers.
In conclusion, it is important for the government to use public benefits to improve lifestyle in order to prevent new diseases. However, I believe that most of them should focus on curing patients currently.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ent. Although promoting balanced habits so as to reduce illnesses is an essential manner...
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Line 3, column 666, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... give them the right way to do exercise everyday. On the other hand, spending publ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the right way to do exercise everyday. On the other hand, spending public money...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'yearly' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'yearlies'.
Suggestion: yearlies
...r example, if VietNamese person pays 00 yearly for health insurance, he will get free ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uld focus on curing patients currently.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.325 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82452587677 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617857142857 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9959849912 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.25 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.75 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290475812176 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101917978279 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838895366886 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160740735024 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0107270843661 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.