Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Numerous large and well-known companies usually prefer public schools to advertise their products and promotional acts. While some people think that this is a beneficial factor for schools to raise more funds, others believe that it has a more negative impact on children. In my opinion, I will discuss why promotional sponsorship will be a significant help to schools and kids rather than a burden to everyone.
On the one hand, it is common nowadays to see advertisements in numerous ways such as on TV and mass media. Corporate advertising in schools has no different. These kids can still view those advertisements in other ways regardless of the company sponsorships held in their schools. With this, both parties can team up together to gain mutual advancements. In one recent example, the Nike brand hosted a marathon event in one of the public schools in Singapore. Students received several perks by organizing the event while Nike promoted its shoe product.
On the other hand, one downside of placing promotional events in schools can be detrimental to the school environment and its surroundings. For instance, these sorts of activities like hosting a concert or promotional tours of the renowned artists can lead to a dirty and rumpled place.
To conclude, advertisements in public schools through corporate sponsorship have a more positive impact on children, instead of taking advantage of them. In my opinion, every student is in safe hands as long as the school environment is well-maintained.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 362, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'school'.
Suggestion: school
...onsorship will be a significant help to schools and kids rather than a burden to everyo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, well, while, for instance, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.5418719212 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 8.36945812808 84% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 5.94088669951 34% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 31.9359605911 122% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.75862068966 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1277.0 1207.87684729 106% => OK
No of words: 245.0 242.827586207 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21224489796 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 3.92707691288 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05868193732 2.71678728327 113% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 139.433497537 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595918367347 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 379.143842365 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.65517241379 219% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2018848113 50.4703680194 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.2307692308 104.977214359 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8461538462 20.9669160288 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 7.25397266985 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247780907403 0.242375264174 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887169454046 0.0925447433944 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739970204627 0.071462118173 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156639579714 0.151781067708 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432020290051 0.0609392437508 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 12.6369458128 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.1260098522 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.9458128079 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 11.5310837438 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32886699507 105% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 55.0591133005 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.94827586207 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 72.2222222222 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 65.0 Out of 90
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