Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.others,however, believe that school is the place to learn this.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the ways that children have to prepare, to integrate in society, are more complex. While some argue that parents should have the main role in this preparation, others refer that teachers should have this responsibility. Both parties have their reasons, that will be explored in this essay, but I personally believe that parents should be the ones responsible to teach this.

As a stating point in our discussion, let us focus on the role of schools. First of all, kids spend most the day in school and they can interact with most people there. For instance, the daily interaction, sometimes 8 hours a day, is a golden opportunity to make activities with children, as role playing, that could teach them to behave in society. In addition to this substantial point, schools are full of other children and adults, so students can learn there, how to relate with one another, learning from experience. These arguments are important but there is one even more persuasive topic to consider.

Now that we examine school role, let us focus on parents. At home, the atmosphere is calmer and parents and their children have a better environment to learn from each other. To clarify this, it is important to refer studies published in New England Journal of Medicine, that reach the conclusion, that calm environments are more effective to learn new behaviours. Finally and most importantly, children have their parents as heroes, and tend to imitate their behaviours, therefore learning and copying from them how they act in society. These supporting facts shows how the mother and father are crucial in children learning abilities.

In summary, there is no doubt that schools have an important role in preparing their students for society, but is at home, with their parents that they have that they have the best environment to learn and where they can receive the best example.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in summary, no doubt, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01910828025 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65289491577 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531847133758 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9791952101 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.571428571 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241826145999 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861637566616 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578236909599 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148687436432 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633374123338 0.056905535591 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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