Claitown University needs both affordable housing for its students and a way to fund the building of such housing. The best solution to this problem is to commission a famous architect known for experimental and futuristic buildings. It is common knowledge that tourists are willing to pay money to tour some of the architect's buildings, so it can be expected that tourists will want to visit this new building. The income from the fees charged to tourists will soon cover the building costs. Furthermore, such a building will attract new students as well as donations from alumni. And even though such a building will be much larger than our current need for student housing, part of the building can be used as office space.
The author’s argument to construct a building having affordable housing for students from fees acquired from tourists of their visit to these building and from alumni’s of the Claitown University might be true but is rife with holes and assumptions which does not allow the author to make a valid case in this context. The author expects that tourists will want to see this new building from which the cost of building will be incurred.
Primarily, I would like to argue the author’s assumption that if he commissions a famous architect wouldn’t it be costly as he is famous and must be costing more comparatively to other architects. Being a famous architect he must have worked hard to reach this level of excellence in his work for which he is praised for and known widely. After all this hard-work he must be costing more the other ordinary architect. Moreover the author assumption that the money from tourist's and alumni's would be sufficient for all that cost that would be incurred in the process of building affordable houses.
Secondarily, the authors fails to cite to construct this new building the University must currently need capital because the tourist's money would come after the construction of building. Moreover, he assumes that alumni’s donations will be there, what if there are none?.
Last but not the least, if all the author’s assumptions might be true and all things fall in places it would still have doubts that what if the new building is not so attractive to the tourists and very few people show up to visit this new building and the cost incurred is high and the University is not able to pay back for it and the loan amount taken for the construction is increasing .
Hence i would like to conclude that the author's argument to build affordable housing for its students and the way to fund the building is based on fallacious assumptions.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 324 350 //more arguments wanted
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 324 350
No. of Characters: 1532 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.728 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.586 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 95 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.89 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.43 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.736 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.223 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 350, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ich he is praised for and known widely. After all this hard-work he must be costing m...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ting more the other ordinary architect. Moreover the author assumption that the money fr...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'tourists'' or 'tourist's'?
Suggestion: tourists'; tourist's
...must currently need capital because the tourists money would come after the construction...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 395, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...taken for the construction is increasing . Hence i would like to conclude that ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...for the construction is increasing . Hence i would like to conclude that the autho...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 7, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...e construction is increasing . Hence i would like to conclude that the authors...
^
Line 9, column 41, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...Hence i would like to conclude that the authors argument to build affordable housing fo...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, moreover, second, so, still, after all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 323.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92569659443 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82556123563 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461300309598 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.3114219602 57.8364921388 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.1 119.503703932 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3 23.324526521 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219681980877 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104987939725 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703490759313 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146072187967 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665178143797 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 48.3550499002 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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