Claitown University needs both affordable housing for its students and a way to fund the building of such housing. The best solution to this problem is to commission a famous architect known for experimental and futuristic buildings. It is common knowledge that tourists are willing to pay money to tour some of the architect's buildings, so it can be expected that tourists will want to visit this new building. The income from the fees charged to tourists will soon cover the building costs. Furthermore, such a building will attract new students as well as donations from alumni. And even though such a building will be much larger than our current need for student housing, part of the building can be used as office space.
The author's view that Claitown university needs to provide sufficient housing for all its students is reasonable and also, they need to find proper funding to make it possible; however, solutions provided to reinforce this idea of building accommodation for students is not cogent and it is rife with fallacies. Since there is no sufficient funding it is not advisable to have a famous architect, who is known for building experimental and futuristic buildings, therefore ideas cited in the premise lead to assumptions that are severely weak and susceptible to attack.
To begin with, author to substantiate his view he said that income provided through tourists will soon cover the building cost. But there is no accurate amount of time mentioned. For instance the money charged by famous architect and material required to build is around $500000 and money that we get from tourists is about $100 per week. although the amount is high nevertheless, to compensate for the amount invested it going to take nearly two decades of time.
Additionally, the money required for maintenance should not be ignored, since it would take lot of work to have proper clean building to attract the visitors and the number of visitors visiting would be varied according to the season, so there will be times when there are a few visitors coming to see the architecture.
Secondly, students studying there would need privacy and a supporting environment where they can concentrate on their studies, so if there are going be frequent visitors and noisy environment. It would be difficult for them to study. For instance if authorities decide to conduct some events to attract visitors and timings of this event are late at night so the students who have classes in the morning will not get sufficient sleep. Therefore comprising with students privacy and study environment is not advisable.
Thirdly, authors point to construct experimental and futuristic building, and use it to attract students is not sufficient, since students who will come to study will not have much expectations from there dormitory and most the students who would join will give their major attention to rankings and level of education that the university provides.Many of student prefer top stay outside and others belong from the same town.
Lastly, the assumption that building could also used as office space, what if there is already sufficient space for office use and their no necessity for additional space, and money saved from building ordinary dormitory which are sufficient for students, could utilized to build libraries and study areas with which there will be more probability to have more admissions and subsequently more donations which would help universities to grow in terms of but technology and infrastructure.
In short, author could not support his argument, he did not provide sufficient evidence to support his idea, he should have studied similar cases of other college buildings that were designed by famous architects and tourists are interested in visiting and paying to watch them. The author should also have emphasized on the detailed explanation of the financial aspects of the building project. A survey of old students and alumni also would have been a good idea as then we will know how interested students are to make donations.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 542 350
No. of Characters: 2738 1500
No. of Different Words: 259 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.825 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.052 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.704 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 155 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 122 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.588 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.933 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The authors view that Claitown university needs to provid...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...gs, therefore ideas cited in the premise lead to assumptions that are severely we...
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Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rovided through tourists will soon cover the building cost. But there is no accur...
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Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Although
...get from tourists is about 00 per week. although the amount is high nevertheless, to com...
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Line 6, column 436, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... morning will not get sufficient sleep. Therefore comprising with students privacy and st...
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Line 8, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...udents is not sufficient, since students who will come to study will not have muc...
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Line 8, column 178, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...s who will come to study will not have much expectations from there dormitory and m...
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Line 8, column 288, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... join will give their major attention to rankings and level of education that the...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Many
... education that the university provides.Many of student prefer top stay outside and ...
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Line 10, column 49, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
...the assumption that building could also used as office space, what if there is alrea...
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Line 10, column 231, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...om building ordinary dormitory which are sufficient for students, could utilized ...
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Line 10, column 264, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'utilize'
Suggestion: utilize
...ich are sufficient for students, could utilized to build libraries and study areas with...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...sufficient evidence to support his idea, he should have studied similar cases of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, lastly, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance, in short, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 11.1786427146 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2798.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 541.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1719038817 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79165631353 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 204.123752495 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486136783734 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 869.4 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 126.680639306 57.8364921388 219% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 174.875 119.503703932 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.8125 23.324526521 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 5.70786347227 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240698395315 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803583917226 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748039298628 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123496743207 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104233771412 0.0628817314937 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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