Some countries encourage teenager to have part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views
In this contemporary time, some people around the world have been in a spirited debate over a question that either temporary work should be done by a teenager or not. In this essay, I will interpret both sides and give my aspect about those statements, and there will be a logical conclusion.
On the one hand, it is certain that those who are students, particularly known as adolescents employ temporary contract, in order to extract money for their tuition fee or even those, struggling from poverty, have been trying to prove a subsistence for his or him family. For example, my friend, who is student and just turning onto 17 years old, is working as a waiter in small café. As the result, he believe that he can help his parents to accumulate a bank savings for their future life moreover, he can prove a future stock. By this way, similar students and teenagers would use their time appropriately. Therefore, before practice into a life, inspiring from part-time work is logical and it would bring more and more advantages in their lifespan.
On the other hand, some people, disagree with the part-time job, is concerning about a age, which is known as more convenient to learn something new or study in high school. Let’s take my uncle as example, when he was a young, he used to do some of the concerns. Now, he have been working as part time manner for 12 years because of knowledge, which could be acquired in collage time. Furthermore, there have been a risk that children could obtain an injury because if they work and study simultaneously, they will exaggerate their loads.
In conclusion, however there is such several pressure from overstate load and for education, if children deal with time-table properly, doing job is far more beneficial for themselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... the one hand, it is certain that those who are students, particularly known as adolesc...
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Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
...waiter in small café. As the result, he believe that he can help his parents to accumul...
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Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...eople, disagree with the part-time job, is concerning about a age, which is known as more con...
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Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... the part-time job, is concerning about a age, which is known as more convenient ...
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Line 5, column 247, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ple, when he was a young, he used to do some of the concerns. Now, he have been working as ...
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Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...sed to do some of the concerns. Now, he have been working as part time manner for 12...
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Line 5, column 298, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... concerns. Now, he have been working as part time manner for 12 years because of knowledg...
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Line 7, column 38, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun pressure seems to be countable; consider using: 'several pressures'.
Suggestion: several pressures
... In conclusion, however there is such several pressure from overstate load and for education, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85294117647 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70537119039 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601307189542 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.0441781651 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.75 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140811779575 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553099735482 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430746005756 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0875566876064 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403037094769 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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