Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Although it is true that the so-called Palean baskets were found in different prehistoric villages, the author’s conclusion that the Palean baskets were not unique is based on several assumptions that may not hold true and lack further evidence. There are several hidden factors the author failed to consider, thus making the conclusion invalid.
The author claimed that the Paleans didn’t cross the river because there’s no Palean boats have been found. However, no evidence of the boat doesn’t mean those boats didn’t exist. Today’s technology does enable scientists to uncover many ancient artifacts, but many still remain underground. It’s very likely that scientists will discover Paleans boats or other vehicles that the Palean people used in the future. If the author provided more evidence in the findings of the scientists, such as all surrounding area have been searched and no evidence of any boats were found, it might strengthen the argument more.
The author’s other assumption to reach his or her conclusion is that the Brim river has always been there between the two villages, and remained big and wide throughout history. This argument needs more validation as bodies of water change its course very frequently over time. Rivers can get bigger when it’s the rainy season, but can disappear during the hot summer months. The author didn’t provide any further information on how the Brim River behaved during that time of the prehistoric villages. Was it that big and wide back then? If it’s just a small river, people could have swum or walked across to the other village.
Last, it is a logical assumption that the baskets were carried or transported to the village across the Brim River. However, what if the baskets were not brought to the other village on purpose? It is entirely possible that someone from the Palean village lost a basket near the river, and the basket got carried away by the river to the other side. It seems coincidental, but cannot be ruled out as a possibility. So the basket found on the side of Lithos may have gotten there accidentally. The author can strengthen the conclusion by providing more information such as multiple palean baskets were found in that village, making it more likely that the Lithos people made those baskets or the Palean people had brought those baskets over.
It’s very likely that the “Palean” baskets are not unique because they have been found in different villages. But this conclusion needs to be revalued as the author’s arguments are based on several weak assumptions, and further evidence needs to be considered to determine whether the baskets are unique to Palea or common across villages
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2183 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.873 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.403 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.291 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, then, thus, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2317.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21846846847 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73817839662 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463963963964 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8278167038 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.333333333 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09523809524 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192254588071 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654941193836 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581192608698 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119012690617 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474155512282 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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