On Balmer Island , where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of moped rented by the islands moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville;s town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.
The writer above claims that reducing the number of moped rentals by 50 percent per day also would decrease the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians by 50 percent. Although the evidences provided by the writer bolster the argument, however after analyzing the certain details, the claim made by the writer seems ambiguous. Firstly,the writer had not clearly stated the cause of accidents; Secondly, he provided an example of neighboring island of Seaville to strengthen his conclusion but he did not do proper research if the island of Seaville had taken any other precaution measure to control the number of accidents than only by limiting the number of moped rentals.
The writer in the letter says that the number of accidents were increased in the summer due to the increased number of moped rentals but he failed to identify the proper cause of accidents. The road condition, other form of transportation that had been used in the island, carelessness of the drivers or the pedestrians themselves also might be the reason behind the cause of accidents about which the writer failed to explain.
Although the writer gave a quitensence of island of Seaville where the number of accidents were reduced by reducing the number of moped rentals, however he failed to do research on other precaution measure that the island of Seaville had followed to limit the accidents. Not only the island of Seaville might have limited the number of moped rentals but they also might have maintained the road condition or decreased the number of other form of transportation also. Similarly, the physical land structure, moped drivers of both the island might be different and thus to expect the same result as that of island of Seaville would be just hypothetical.
The writer should do further research on the possible causes of accidents and also about the similarity of nature of accidents on island of Seaville and Island of Balmer, or-else without any complete research he cannot make me support his argument of limiting the numer of moped rentals to limit the number of accidents.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 348 350
No. of Characters: 1720 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.319 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.943 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.591 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.812 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.558 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.74 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.314 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The writer above claims that reducing the number of...
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Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...moped rentals by 50 percent per day also would decrease the number of accidents i...
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Line 1, column 330, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ails, the claim made by the writer seems ambiguous. Firstly,the writer had not cl...
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Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... by the writer seems ambiguous. Firstly,the writer had not clearly stated the cause...
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Line 5, column 462, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... number of other form of transportation also. Similarly, the physical land structur...
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Line 5, column 482, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m of transportation also. Similarly, the physical land structure, moped drivers o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04899135447 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68249096777 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.417867435159 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 547.2 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.8473053892 166% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.8596319853 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 194.666666667 119.503703932 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.5555555556 23.324526521 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22222222222 5.70786347227 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314897887227 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150921907988 0.0743258471296 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700945685668 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217120751279 0.128457276422 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291501214592 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 14.3799401198 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 48.3550499002 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.197005988 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.1389221557 154% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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