Independent writing TPO 51
Nowadays, there is a debate among experts about positive and negative effects of tv and movies on young generation manner. Indeed, spending time to watch television products have advantages and disadvantages for any individual. However, in my opinion it depends on the person who is the user of that. pesronally, I suggest tv shows can teach people about the world and other related matters.
First and foremost, most tv programs are narrating stories and every story of an author is about life. Consequently, a young person can reach to a diverse range of stories and myths about life by watching movies. my personal experience is a compelling example of this matter. When I was 14 a tv series with a strange story of love was on the air. I was watching that every other day after school and it was an absulote opportuniry for me to have a little aknowledge of love. after a while, I was in the same situation of that play and managed to do my best. As a result, the love story of mine concluded to marriage with the most beautiful girl I've ever visited.
Secondly, tv as the main part of the mass media can assist people to gain information about the world around. On the other hand, initially, artists and workers of television can help the average part of the society by producing amazing and purposeful programs. For instance, one of my friends, who works on tv project, recently, started a great informative tv program in which he introduces more than 3 books to the audiences every day. Hence, you can watch an episode of that tv show to get access to different titles topics of new published books.
To sum up, I assume that movies and tv shows can help to every person because of the stories it can tell and because of the information it can give to people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Pesronally
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...is a compelling example of this matter. When I was 14 a tv series with a strange sto...
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Suggestion: After
...me to have a little aknowledge of love. after a while, I was in the same situation of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1456.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59305993691 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61874117315 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548895899054 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8494327338 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8125 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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