Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities
Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Working overtime become a common phenomenon today due to fierce competition in the workplace, which keeps people away from leisure activities to rewind themself. Although someone says its the way to make fortune by such hard working for living. In my point of view, however, it has an adverse effect both physically and mentally even resulting serious disease.
There are numerous factors which contribute to people who have to work long hours, such as the project mission is near due time, peer pressure, etc. But long working hours always lead to low efficiency in work. In addition,people sacrifice leisure time to do regular exercise,play sport games and unwind in outdoor activities,they may suffer from physical difficulties such as cardiac diseases and namely obesity . Moreover, the lack of social activities with family and friends can threaten their relationships and create psychological diseases such as depression.
Although , the demand of long working hours may secure the job and make sufficient wealth for better living and increase the productivity of company or contribute to the growth of GDP in our society, But it is the time for us to get to know the importance work and life balance today. For instance, the report of sudden death due to high pressure and overtime work from media and the statistics of high rate of cardiac and obesity problem related to this are always remind us to have relax and go for games and sports now and then.
In a nut shell, people need a balance between work and life which not only benefit the people themselves but also good for the company even our society because it is a sustainable way to growth.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 185, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... rewind themself. Although someone says its the way to make fortune by such hard wo...
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Line 5, column 223, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , people
...d to low efficiency in work. In addition,people sacrifice leisure time to do regular ex...
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Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , play
...fice leisure time to do regular exercise,play sport games and unwind in outdoor activ...
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Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...t games and unwind in outdoor activities,they may suffer from physical difficulties s...
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Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...h as cardiac diseases and namely obesity . Moreover, the lack of social activities...
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Line 9, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...seases such as depression. Although , the demand of long working hours may se...
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Line 9, column 467, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'reminded'.
Suggestion: reminded
...sity problem related to this are always remind us to have relax and go for games and s...
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Line 9, column 485, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'relaxed'.
Suggestion: relaxed
...ed to this are always remind us to have relax and go for games and sports now and the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02877697842 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72395832927 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60071942446 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.1350134195 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.8 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229352969039 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883291476999 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473605126357 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131947417277 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345308908347 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.