If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it are justifiable
In this world all the people have their motivation to achieve something. Everyone has their goal, it may be some position or it may be earning money. but this goals motivate people to work hard to achieve their goals. people will try to achieve their goal by taking steps which might be immoral and evil. this immoral means taken are not justifiable.
All the people in the world want to achieve their goals. some choose moral ways, some choose immoral ways. The people taking immoral means to achieve their goals will not hesitate in causing damage to the people in their way. Because of their means many people around them gets hurt, physically or mentally. For example, to earn more money Pablo Escobar, the notorious drug lord of 1980s, supplied several thousand tons of drugs in america. These drugs were bought by American teenagers cause heavy damage to the teenagers’ family. His actions resulted in thousands of deaths, even his cosines’ death.
In history, there are several examples that the people who take immoral way to attain their goals, suffers from a downfall. Hitler the leader of Germany which was the reason of Second world war, wanted to defeat allied nations. he also wanted to kill as many as jews as he can. he immorally killed nearly 6 millions of jews in the world war. this military campaign became the reason of his downfall. The German army could not bear the lethal stroke of allied nations and Russian military, eventually resulted in his downfall.
Moreover, in today world the poverty rate is very high. The world is suffering from decreasing in opportunities to earn money and survive. this destitution forces such people to take immoral ways to earn money for the sake of their family. this is why the crime rate in underdeveloped countries is high. even in developed country like america is suffering from high crime rate. this people try to earn money by looting money from street walkers and stores. this means taken by them is due to their necessity, but it is still immoral. To earn money, some people do not even hesitate to take others life.
To sum up, To achieve goals one should try whatever is necessary, but it should be moral. In this process one should avoid taking illegal means. people should avoid hurting others for their own benefits and be moral in their life. such illegal ways will result in their downfall. Government should also try their best to provide such destitute family jobs, so that they do not choose wrong path.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 429.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85547785548 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31683808463 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487179487179 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.2193840548 60.3974514979 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.1935483871 118.986275619 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.8387096774 23.4991977007 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.29032258065 5.21951772744 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 7.80617977528 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 21.0 5.13820224719 409% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0710821719089 0.243740707755 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0238815437612 0.0831039109588 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450782797916 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0445648414768 0.150359130593 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322253859605 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 14.1392134831 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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