The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
The argument claims that the autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its border and in order to maintain this the country should send the illegal immigrants back to their country. this argument states that illegal immigrants entering the country are threat to the economy and national identity. The argument has missed lot of vital information to substantiate the certain course of action which make the argument unconvincing.
Firstly, the author assumes that the illegal immigrants movement to the country endangers the economy and national identity. The assumptions fails to acknowledge the pros and cons of illegal immigrants to the country. For eg, on the positive side illegal immigrants sometimes take up the lower level job and contribute to the growth of the economy and on the negative side they can be involved in crime and raise safety concerns among the natives of the country. The data around the types of jobs and how do they contribute in the development of the region and what other social differences are created by these immigrants would be analyzing the situation.
Secondly, the argument doesn't provide any detail about how the country identifies any illegal immigrant if there is no current way to identify the cross border movement. what if the domestic country demand for immigrants is driving increase in the number of immigrants in the country.
Thirdly, the argument nowhere mentions the reasons for the illegal movement of the immigrants. if the argument can provides more details regarding the political and economic conditions which made the immigrants move to different country, then the argument will be better positioned to concur with the conclusion.
In summary, if the argument provides more details on the above-mentioned points then the argument can be made stronger and convincing to the audience.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 299 350
No. of Characters: 1529 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.158 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.114 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.71 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.481 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.48 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.748 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...legal immigrants back to their country. this argument states that illegal immigrants...
^^^^
Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'immigrants'' or 'immigrant's'?
Suggestion: immigrants'; immigrant's
...ly, the author assumes that the illegal immigrants movement to the country endangers the e...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'fail'.
Suggestion: fail
... and national identity. The assumptions fails to acknowledge the pros and cons of ill...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 24, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...he situation. Secondly, the argument doesnt provide any detail about how the countr...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 171, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
... to identify the cross border movement. what if the domestic country demand for immi...
^^^^
Line 7, column 96, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...the illegal movement of the immigrants. if the argument can provides more details ...
^^
Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
... of the immigrants. if the argument can provides more details regarding the political an...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 298.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24496644295 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77216347286 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489932885906 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6569774535 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.25 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356771473311 0.218282227539 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141264308578 0.0743258471296 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100011515508 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192563239338 0.128457276422 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0996331992623 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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