Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this argument, the author states that the Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. to support this conclusion the author has stated various evidences regarding the baskets and the village Palae. However, the conclusion made by the author suffers from several flaws and is therefore scarcely credible and unconvincing as it stands, albeit it may appear plausible at cursory glance.
To begin with, the author draws conclusion saying recently archaeologists discovered such Plalean baskets in Lithos and thus the baskets are not uniquely Palean. 'Recently' is a vague term used by the author, the author must provide us with more information regarding how recently have archaeologists found the baskets there. It might be possible that one of the villagers visited Palea and buyed the basked and bought the basket in Lithos. Hence the author must provide more information regarding the recent discovery of the basket.
In addition to this, the author mentions there is a very deep and broad brim river near the village Lithos and by this statement he draws out the conclusion that no one would be able to cross the river. Providing no further evidence the author says that there are no boats nearby so there is no case that the villagers would be able to cross the village. There might be some other road which was used by the people living in Lithos to cross the river and get out of the village. The archaeologists might just not know about the hidden road to cross the Brim river. Further investigation is necessary to come to the conclusion that there is no way to cross the river.
Lastly, the author has stated that both of these villages are prehistoric and ancient. Thus there is a possibility that the basket was been brought by some of the tourist who visited Lithos a few months ago. Also, since the villages are prehistoric if there was a basked present there ages ago the basket would by now decomposed in the sand. the author needs to provide more evidences regarding the basket found to be Palean.
In retrospect, the author seems precipitous to jump to the conclusion based on a series of problematic assumptions pertaining the baskets to not be uniquely Palean. To strengthen the argument, further investigation and analysis are needed. If the argument had included given points discussed above it would have been more through and logical.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 398 350
No. of Characters: 1925 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.467 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.837 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.573 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.412 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.993 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.364 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...alean baskets were not uniquely Palean. to support this conclusion the author has ...
^^
Line 2, column 439, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...basked and bought the basket in Lithos. Hence the author must provide more informatio...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 87, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e villages are prehistoric and ancient. Thus there is a possibility that the basket ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: WAS_BEEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'was' or 'has been'?
Suggestion: was; has been
... there is a possibility that the basket was been brought by some of the tourist who visi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 151, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ity that the basket was been brought by some of the tourist who visited Lithos a few months...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 342, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...et would by now decomposed in the sand. the author needs to provide more evidences ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, lastly, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92964824121 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61554289194 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449748743719 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9317705867 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.263157895 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9473684211 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161403544982 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057391216533 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392708423236 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101336676012 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045004580367 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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