Bullying is a big problem in many schools.
What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
In the midst of globalized and modernized world, there are still many thorny issues in society. One of the most alarming problem is the existence of bullying in educational system. There are a range of reasons lead to this polarizing problem and efficient methods to mitigate it. All of these will be outlined in the following paragraph before my rational conclusion is reached.
First and foremost, the main reason lead to this agenda is the neglect of parents in caring and teaching their children about the repercussion of violence. The children who expose to many violent scence on television, games, sport events can easily become aggressive and douchebag. This can make them see violent can help them gain success in life and see the winning is everything. Secondly, the factors create this problems come from the lack of knowledge in children about the negative facet of bullying. Most of children have the personal characteristic that cover by the crave for the success and envy. That's the reason why children bullying the peer in school to make people seen them as the "superhero". Moreover, the teacher and adult surrounding them pay no heed to this issue which cause this problem more and more worse in educational system. According to the current survey in the UK, more than 40% of young students witnessed the bully in their school life.
To tackle this alraming problem, we need to care more about the mental health of the youngsters and teach them about the heinous result that bullying caused. Furthermore, parents and adults have the responsibility to report the advertisement and games which contained violent or unaccepted scenery in order to help our children stay away from this abominable behaviour. Government and school can organize more programme about how terrible that bullying cause and impose the strictly rule for individual who make this behaviour on purpose. Finally, each of us has the obligation to share with the young especially teenagers about the demerits, harmful influence that bullying affect to the others' mental and physical health and ease this problems as soon as possible.
In conclusion, it is hardly unaccepted that there are tremendous reason that result in bullying especially this existence in educational system and many ways to trigger this alarming issue which mentioned above. I personally believe we can apply one of these solutions to mitigate it.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 413, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...verything. Secondly, the factors create this problems come from the lack of knowledg...
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Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the children') or simply say ''Most children''.
Suggestion: Most of the children; Most children
...n about the negative facet of bullying. Most of children have the personal characteristic that c...
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Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e personal characteristic that cover by the crave for the success and envy. Thats the rea...
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Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
... by the crave for the success and envy. Thats the reason why children bullying the pe...
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Line 3, column 831, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'worse' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worse
...issue which cause this problem more and more worse in educational system. According to the...
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Line 5, column 733, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ers mental and physical health and ease this problems as soon as possible. In con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1679389313 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7924745074 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526717557252 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.9 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0345546343 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.833333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158408584868 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522770972132 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0252085876075 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100312101992 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173430947844 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 413, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...verything. Secondly, the factors create this problems come from the lack of knowledg...
^^^^
Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the children') or simply say ''Most children''.
Suggestion: Most of the children; Most children
...n about the negative facet of bullying. Most of children have the personal characteristic that c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e personal characteristic that cover by the crave for the success and envy. Thats the rea...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
... by the crave for the success and envy. Thats the reason why children bullying the pe...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 831, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'worse' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worse
...issue which cause this problem more and more worse in educational system. According to the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 733, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ers mental and physical health and ease this problems as soon as possible. In con...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1679389313 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7924745074 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526717557252 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.9 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0345546343 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.833333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158408584868 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522770972132 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0252085876075 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100312101992 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173430947844 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.