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Students could recieve a better, more effecient education if they spend 11 months a year studying.

Some might think that making students learn for 11 months in a year will increase efficiency in learning, but I do not think so for two reasons. One is that students will be tired after 11 months, and the other is that the best education doesn't come from school.

To begin with, no single person can withhold 11 straight months of learning. A normal school year lasts 8 months, and an extra 3 months cut from vacation will make students restless. For example, if one lets a teacher work 50 hours a week, the teacher will be tired and quit the job. The teacher hardly resists the temptation to get some rest, and therefore, the efficiency will be not higher but lower. A teacher who can work for 30 hours a week instead of 40 hours will be more energetic and efficient in teaching. Therefore, he will have better results than the other teacher who works for 50 hours a week. This same rule also applies to what a programmer does. Sitting in front of a computer for a tiring 10 hours per day, the programmer could not possibly avoid a single bug in the program. He will become absent-minded and slack off. Similarly, a student working for more than the normal school year will become exhausted and inefficient to such an unreasonable argument.

Secondly, knowledge comes from every single part of life from playing games to chatting, not just school alone. What's more, the knowledge harvested from communication with others is more important than the math and English learned in school. For example, life’s morals can be learned from witnessing heroic acts, and it is not at all similar to the stories heard in school. Once I met an orphan in Shanghai. He was very positive and wore a smile on his face every day. We talked often, and he was never angry, no matter what happened. There's a saying that goes, “what you hear from others is fake, and what you see with your own eyes is true." What is heard in school is fake, but what is seen is true. Education in school is not so important, but lessons learned in the outside world are.

For the reasons mentioned above, there is no logical reason for schools to shorten vacations to 1 month. I would encourage students to rest and return to a new semester, more engaged and rejuvenated.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, for example, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60199004975 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46589067406 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539800995025 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4457892448 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0909090909 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2727272727 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86363636364 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138238956729 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428679919507 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476759685433 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100270410989 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508962866217 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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