Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
It is a common belief that many children spend hours using smartphones day by day. While there are various benefits of using smartphone, it is actually a negative development.
The main cause leading to the necessity of smartphone in daily life is that smartphone is small, slight and flexible to bring everywhere and be used for different purposes. No matter where children stay, in urban or rural areas, smartphone can connect everyone, give them a chance to study together without moving a long distance. Another reasons of high children’s using smartphone frequency is that numerous applications was created which entertain children after a long time studying hard at school. These applications are also seen as a teacher’s method for enhancing the cohesion when students play together.
Nevertheless, I firmly believe that the growing number of children who frequently spend their day on smartphones is having an overall negative effect. Concentrating on the screen for a long time is detrimental to children’s health a lot such as lessening eyesight, suffering from stress and other negative conditions. Besides, spending hours on smartphone instead of doing exercises regularly cause the badly physical appearances, they will become obesity and appear spot on their skin. Children who use most of their time on phones do not have enough time for many outdoor activities and practicing their communication skills. Gradually they will be confused when talking with a strange person and lose many opportunities in the future.
To sum up, it is clear that the time consumption on smartphones brings us a lot of benefits. However, it is evident that the drawbacks of using phones in the wrong way makes it a negative phenomenon in society.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, however, if, nevertheless, so, while, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26071428571 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96883257135 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621428571429 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4870479426 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.307692308 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222398801199 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811575896323 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730099810724 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136807449513 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687819513159 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
It is a common belief that many children...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...it is actually a negative development. The main cause leading to the necessity ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... cohesion when students play together. Nevertheless, I firmly believe that the ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lose many opportunities in the future. To sum up, it is clear that the time con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, however, if, nevertheless, so, while, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26071428571 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96883257135 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621428571429 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4870479426 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.307692308 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222398801199 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811575896323 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730099810724 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136807449513 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687819513159 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.