Toefl writing task one
The reading text and the lecture are both about the Moai statues located in Easter island. The author of the article feels that it lead to decrease and collapse of culture and civilization. The lecturer disputes the claims made in the article and says that there are other reasons.
According to the reading passage, a vast amount of valuable trees were cut down for the transfer of statues from its making place to the actual palce. The article mentions that they were rolled by making tracks of wood. This is challenged by the lecturer saying it is not correct. He states that the statues were actually transferred using the ropes by tilting them from side to side. Additionally, he says that men power was used and not the wooden logs from trees.
Secondly, the authors claims that all the palm trees on the island were cut gradually and resulted in deforestation. The lecturer, however asserts that the actual reason behind deforestation was rats. Further, he says that people when immigrated to the island brought rats with them for food. Researchers found the remains of palm seeds that were chewed by rats. He goes on to say that the rats had affected the palm trees and lead to deforestation.
Finally, the author points that there was decline in population because of food shortage.He mentions that population declined from as high as twenty thousands to the lowest at two thousands. The lecturer rebutted that by saying that the estimate was based on an old misunderstanding of when the island was actually originated and settled. He supports his point by saying that there were never more than two thousand people residing there.
- Some people want to have a job where they can make or do things with their hands Others prefer having a job where they can works with their heads and thinking Which type of job do you prefer 76
- Some students prefer classes with frequent discussions between the professor and with almost no lectures Others students prefer classes with many lectures and almost no discussions PREFERANCE 90
- All high school students should be required to have three years of studying a foreign language Agree Disagree 60
- All high school students should be required to have three years of studying a foreign language Agree Disagree 60
- Toefl writing task one 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d collapse of culture and civilization. The lecturer disputes the claims made in th...
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Line 7, column 90, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
... in population because of food shortage.He mentions that population declined from ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, however, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1373.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92114695341 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57040980981 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530465949821 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.299540162 49.2860985944 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8125 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4375 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3125 7.06452816374 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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