Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Developing countries often receive money donation from wealthy nations, but it is not useful to get rid of poverty completely. Due to that, some people claim that developed countries should oblige poorer ones with other types of help instead of giving money. For me, I completely agree with this opinion to some extent, which will be discussed in this essay.
First of all, the most obvious problem is that those financial assistance does not ofen reach its intended receiver. There is a significant risk that the corrupt government will misuesd it while the poor can only receive very little or even nothing. As a result, those who need help the most still struggle in the vicious cycle of poverty and they have to borrow a large amount of money to earn for living.
In the other hand, it is believed that education must be the root cause of poverty. Since then, rich country should offer educational facilities, the truly effective teaching method to poorer countries instead of pouring billion dollars into the government. Just only education that can help people manage to increase their living conditions. Nowadays, many uneducated people have to work almost day and night in utterly dangerous places with very low wages. In contrast, people who have chance to go to school do have more opportunities to be employed for a high-paid job than others.
In conclusion, i believed that financial aid helps nothing to deal with poverty in developing countries. And what really should be done is deploying teachers, building more schools and providing more educational resources.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...paid job than others. In conclusion, i believed that financial aid helps nothi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, so, still, then, while, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08045977011 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58101650293 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.639846743295 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.5790597362 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.0 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298389282953 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893221742791 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0957626475161 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158479349069 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0930474727876 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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