GOVERNMENT INVESTMENT IN ARTS, SUCH AS MUSIC AND THEATRE, IS A WASTE OF MONEY. GOVERNMENTS MUST INVEST THIS MONEY IN PUBLIC SERVICES INSTEAD.
It has been a common practice that artists get financial support due to the small earnings. Thus, I disagree to cut of the fund, instead, it should be increased regarding the importance of art in people’s life and its identity of countries’ culture.
Firstly, many people enjoy art as a primary need. Art is believed to encourage happiness for the enjoyer, no matter what kind of art it is, music, paint, theater, movie and others. People who like to listen to music or take a break for painting tend to have a low percentage for worrying their life. It is believed that enjoying art activate the sense of humor in brain and release happiness, because of it, everyone should support art.
Secondly, art is the biggest part of most countries’ culture. It can be denied that culture is an identity of one’s country so as the art. Country which lose their art means for the extinction of the culture. My country, Indonesia, has faced an ‘art rage’ with its neighbor, Malaysia, where its arts claimed by Malaysia as theirs and have gotten patent for it. I think it is my country which did not put an effort to manage the art while the neighbor attracted to art very much as a culture.
To sum up, it is crucial to support the artwork and the worker nationally because of its essential value and have become an identity for some nationalities. Thus, it is a must to agree for the financial support.
- GOVERNMENT INVESTMENT IN ARTS, SUCH AS MUSIC AND THEATRE, IS A WASTE OF MONEY. GOVERNMENTS MUST INVEST THIS MONEY IN PUBLIC SERVICES INSTEAD. 11
- A person worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possesions. Old fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seems important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 171, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...y for some nationalities. Thus, it is a must to agree for the financial support.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, while, i think, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1179.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.716 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75102599043 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3301464175 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6923076923 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0192190061941 0.244688304435 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00933685034232 0.084324248473 11% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0149354830135 0.0667982634062 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.015897296814 0.151304729494 11% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00925274325705 0.056905535591 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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