The following letter is from a group of Linford College alumni to the chair of the art
department at the college.
“In a recent survey of college graduates, 90 percent agreed that participating in an
internship increased their chances of finding a job after graduation, but last year, only 40
percent of Linford’s graduating art students had completed an internship. Skyway Designs,
located in nearby Linford City, is the perfect company for students to intern with for a
number of reasons: They offer internships in all of their departments, so every student is
sure to find work that they are interested in. Additionally, their internships offer flexible
working hours. Finally, Skyway Designs is known for being one of the best in the design
business, as over 80 percent of businesses in Linford City have used the services of
Skyway Designs for their design needs. Given the vital role that work experience plays in
a student’s success after graduation, we recommend that our art department require all art
students to complete an internship with Skyway Designs before graduation.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order
to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are
reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate
the recommendation.
In the letter, the alumni recommend the chair of the art department that all the art graduates should enroll in an internship program in Skyway Designs. They made this claim based on the assumption that a higher percentage of college graduate praises internship because it increases the chance of finding a job and the Skyway Designs provides certain facilities for the interns. This assumption may lead to the conclusion that the alumni's recommendation is viable, however, these assumptions have some voids in which the Chair of the art department needs to look through.
The alumni enunciated about a survey but there were no details about the survey. The survey can be invalid for many reasons such as maybe the survey was conducted along with a group of people who are from one or a few particular fields and do not represent the whole diversity of art graduates. Moreover, the alumni did not delineate about the size of people among which the survey was conducted. The size may be too small to pronounce the survey validly.
Furthermore, even if the Skyway Designs offers internships in all of their departments, there is no proclamation about the number of departments or the range of variety in their works. There can only be a few of departments and their variety of work might be very low so that all the graduates may not able to find the job they are interested in. Additionally, if the range of variety is low, then there may be very little opportunity to learn new skills even if a graduate finds a department relatable to his work.
Finally, the letter asserted the Skyway Designs as one of the best in the design business because over 80 percent of business in Linford City used its design. The Skyway Design has more customers does not mean that they are the best in creative work. The reason behind other businesses are interested in collaborating with them might be the Skyway Designs is economic or they are responsive.
In sum, even though the alumni have some potential points in their letter, the craters in the assumptions might weaken or nullify their contention.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1701 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.738 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.623 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.643 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.26 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.669 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'praises'' or 'praise's'?
Suggestion: praises'; praise's
...a higher percentage of college graduate praises internship because it increases the cha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 359.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87186629526 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68927042479 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504178272981 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0458964248 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.928571429 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6428571429 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172198883061 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575813522862 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360661155916 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087394923774 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033747324312 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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