An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The International development organization think that to combat Vitamin A Deficiency among the people of Tagus, new engineered breed of millet should be grown which is abundant in Vitamin-A. Interantional organization comes to this conclusion based on the fact that millet is the staple food of Tagus. But, before arriving at this point it is important to answer the following three questions.
First and foremost , Is it feasible to grow the newly engineered millet (High in Vitamin-A) in the country of Tagus? Although even the government provides the subsidies to the farmer, It is quite possible that the weather conditions in the country are not suitable for the crop to grow. Even if the crop can grow in the country of tagus, Can the government actually subsidise the crop for all the farmers who are growing it? Perhaps, For getting the subsidy most of the farmers want to grow the new variety, It might not be feasible for the government to subsidise it and eventually other economical problems arise.So, it is not a feasible plan. If any of the above examples hold merit, then the suggestion of the International Developmental Organization holds no water.
Secondly, Will the people readily adapt to the new type of crop? Even though millet is the staple food of the people of Tagus, It is possible that due to the prices of the newly engineered millet quite high than the natural one, People are reluctant to buy the high Vitamin millet. It is also possible that the high Vitamin millet is causing side effects in people and therefore no one is ready to consume it. If any of the given examples comes out to be true, then the International Developmental oragnizations plan of combating Vitamin-A deficiency through growing engineered millet can turn out be a disaster.
Finally, The main question that arises is that will the Vitamin-A in the crop translate into human body? It is pehaps possible that the cooking style of the people in Tagus mostly involves deep frying (or) Some other technique which might result in decreasing Vitamin-A quantity in the final product consumed by the people. If this turns out to be the case, then even if the crop contains high Vitamin-A , It will not be translated into people and the assertion of the International Developmental Organization does not work.
In Conclusion, the suggestions of the organization as of now are flawed. If there can more evidence which can support the given statements in a formidable way, Then we can evaluate the suggestions of the International Developmental Organization. But, As of now these suggestions stand unwarranted.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2122 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.867 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.888 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.824 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.355 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Suggestion: ,
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Line 2, column 588, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
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Suggestion: So
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Suggestion: ,
...even if the crop contains high Vitamin-A , It will not be translated into people a...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a formidable way" with adverb for "formidable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... which can support the given statements in a formidable way, Then we can evaluate the suggestions o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2174.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 435.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99770114943 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93553525216 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445977011494 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6637589561 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.777777778 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412226844521 0.218282227539 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128242959276 0.0743258471296 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111584145277 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229786756469 0.128457276422 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128377304172 0.0628817314937 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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