“In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped from decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.”
The argument states that the unemployment problem in the town can be mitigated by constructing the autotech automobile manufacturing plant in that area. stated this way, the argument fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies on the assumption for which there is no evidence. Hence, the argument is rather weak, unconvinced and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily assumes that the construction of the automobile manufacturing plan in the hillview landfill, which is a perfect site to build, will reduce the unemployment problem. this statement is a stretch and is not substantiated in any way. there can be many reasons for this assumption of hillview landfill is the best suited site. Had the author said that, the hillview landfill is a barren land, where the farming of the land is not efficacious and will be better used for the construction of the manufacturing industry, then the author would have sounded much more clearer. But the author fails to mention several factors, wheather the landfill is easily accessible to all sorts of people, carrying the machinery to-n-fro and other resource related factors. The argument could have been much more clearer, if the author clearly mentioned, why he chose the hillview landfill to be the perfect site for the construction of the industry.
Second, the author assumes that the construction of the automobile industry will mitigate the unemployment problem of the area. this again is a very weak and unconvincing statement as the author fails to mention the correlation between the two. it is not always necessary that the manufacturing industry will employ the local people as the required labor. To illustrate, the manufacturing industry may require the labor who are skilled to perform the job, the locals may not be skilled in that particular sector. clearly, the argument fails to mention the reason that the unemployed locals will get employement in the manufacturing industry which might setup in their area. The argument would have been much more convincing, if the author clearly mentioned the correlation of setting up the industry will lead to employment of the locals, by provinding evidences and examples of similar situations in the past.
Finally, the argument concluded by saying that the autotech manufacturing industry will get attracted by giving the tax incentives. The author did not mentioned how exactly giving the tax incentives will attract setting up the manufacturing industry in that particular area. Without convincing answers to the above questions, one is left with an impression that the augument is more of a wishful thinkinking rather than a substantive one.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons. The argument could be further strengthened by giving all the contributing factors associated with it. it is better to know all the contributing factors, in order to access the situation/decision, in our case setting up the manufacturing plant in the hillview landfill.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 494 350
No. of Characters: 2530 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.714 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.121 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.923 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 155 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.19 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.643 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Stated
...obile manufacturing plant in that area. stated this way, the argument fails to mention...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 194, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
..., will reduce the unemployment problem. this statement is a stretch and is not subst...
^^^^
Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ch and is not substantiated in any way. there can be many reasons for this assumption...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 814, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'clearer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: clearer
...tors. The argument could have been much more clearer, if the author clearly mentioned, why h...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 129, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...e the unemployment problem of the area. this again is a very weak and unconvincing s...
^^^^
Line 13, column 246, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ention the correlation between the two. it is not always necessary that the manufa...
^^
Line 13, column 514, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Clearly
...t be skilled in that particular sector. clearly, the argument fails to mention the reas...
^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 152, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
... the tax incentives. The author did not mentioned how exactly giving the tax incentives w...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, may, second, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 16.3942115768 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2613.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 493.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30020283976 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02543503684 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432048681542 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 789.3 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9514855125 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.772727273 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4090909091 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214775576298 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709533672647 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074054676967 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12273959866 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489528790498 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.