A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-
processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty- year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evoluate the prediction.
In this article, the author has come to the conclusion that residents of Mentia will suffer fewer headaches in the future because of the increasing levels of salicylates in the residents' food. They come to this conclusion after a twenty year long study to see the effects of increasing salicylates in foods on headache symptoms of Mentia. However, before we can agree with the conclusion of this study there are three questions the author must answer.
One, are all headache symptoms the same? In this study the author assumes that all headaches are caused by the same thing, and all headaches can be cured by salicylates. But that is simply not possible, some headaches could be caused by some other illness that can not be cured by just salicylates. If any of this is valid then the author's conclusion is seriously weakened.
Another question that must be answered is that, are salicylates the only cause of fewer headaches? As mentioned in the prompt it is a twenty-year long study. It could be the case that in that time medical facilities have improved and people have started to live a healthier lifestyle. The author completely disregards the ever-changing medical field. If they have actually overlooked the medical advancements of the Medical sector then their argument holds no water.
The author also blindly trusts the research done by food-processing companies. Then a natural question arises, can company research be trusted? Big corporations have had a history of falsifying research. They may hide the amount of salicylates they might be adding to their food products or many other critical details. This could very well be a strategy to defend their use of salicylates as a food preservative. If we could get a closer look at the research they carried out, and what were the factors that affected their results, we might be able to draw some valid and informed conclusions.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on many unstated assumptions and multiple unanswered questions. If the author is able to provide the answer to these questions, then only can one arrive at the same conclusion that the author wants the reader to arrive at, and one can surely say that residents of Mentia will suffer fewer headaches in the future because of the increasing levels of salicylates in the residents' food.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1932 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.866 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.726 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.208 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.523 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'residents'' or 'resident's'?
Suggestion: residents'; resident's
...increasing levels of salicylates in the residents food. They come to this conclusion afte...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hree questions the author must answer. One, are all headache symptoms the same?...
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Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t can not be cured by just salicylates. If any of this is valid then the authors c...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...lates. If any of this is valid then the authors conclusion is seriously weakened. A...
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Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ates the only cause of fewer headaches? As mentioned in the prompt it is a twenty-...
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Line 5, column 353, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...egards the ever-changing medical field. If they have actually overlooked the medic...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... then their argument holds no water. The author also blindly trusts the res...
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Line 10, column 460, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'residents'' or 'resident's'?
Suggestion: residents'; resident's
...increasing levels of salicylates in the residents food.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, may, so, then, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 397.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01007556675 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79843085004 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476070528967 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.4116438471 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.45 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.85 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195194420085 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651029310406 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770930836937 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118832172375 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651732190147 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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