In surveys, Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
According to the survey which was done in Mason City, the residents of the city have, favorite recreation activity which is water sports like swimming, boating and fishing. On the contractory the Mason river, these sports rarely happen. The resident are complaining for that the quality of the water in the river is degrading and it is smelling. So, they have asked the city government to devote more money towards the riverside recreation facilities.
This argument lies on series of unpersuasive assumption and it is logically not apt. There are many reason to prove it.
First, it could happen that the survey have only included a few number of people as their subject and this may have result the a one sided answer. It could also be that the question which have been asked are not perfect. Unless the people conducting the survey provides with the number of participants and the type of questions which where asked, it would be difficult to accept the result of the survey.
Secondly, if the water sports was among the favorite recreation activity of the resident of the Mason City than the river should be used more often, which is not the case. It could be that only a small percent of the residents like water sports and they are demanding more money to be spend.
Thirdly, the quality of water in the river might degrade due to the people throwing their waste into the river, washing clothes near the river. There might also be a factory near by whose untreated waste water is being added directly into the river. On increasing the water sport, the river would be more dirty as there are chances of oil leak from the boats, people throwing food packets, can into the river when they go for fishing. Increasing the budget to riverside recreation facilities would not be helpful to increase the quality of the river water.
The smell from the river could be caused due to natural resource like, the river bed may contain the Sulphur which have a pungent smell. So, it would be difficult to remove the smell.
Till the survey is not taken properly and the factory nearby which might be causing the water pollution is not taken into account, and all the other factor mention above, the government should not increase the budget on riverside recreation facilities.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... water in the river is degrading and it is smelling. So, they have asked the city governmen...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 96, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
... and it is logically not apt. There are many reason to prove it. First, it could happen th...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...en that the survey have only included a few number of people as their subject and this may...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
... their subject and this may have result the a one sided answer. It could also be that...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...he river. There might also be a factory near by whose untreated waste water is being ad...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...get on riverside recreation facilities.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77918781726 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34201805527 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43654822335 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 589.5 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7874474778 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.611111111 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257046344786 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927684269279 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100918230299 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12666268067 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137092213252 0.0628817314937 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... water in the river is degrading and it is smelling. So, they have asked the city governmen...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 96, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
... and it is logically not apt. There are many reason to prove it. First, it could happen th...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...en that the survey have only included a few number of people as their subject and this may...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
... their subject and this may have result the a one sided answer. It could also be that...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...he river. There might also be a factory near by whose untreated waste water is being ad...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...get on riverside recreation facilities.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77918781726 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34201805527 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43654822335 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 589.5 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7874474778 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.611111111 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257046344786 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927684269279 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100918230299 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12666268067 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137092213252 0.0628817314937 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.