“Twenty years ago, Dr Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centred approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centred method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
The author of the article asserts that the interview-centered method on the island of Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions contrary to the observation-centered method used by Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, twenty years ago. Recent Interviews with children living in Tertia signify that these children spend most of the time talking about their biological parents. For the assertion of the author to be evaluated correctly, the following three questions have to be answered in a clear way.
Is the Island of Tertia similar to other islands in terms of culture? The author has stated that the method is recently used on the island of Tertia and can be used to study the cultures of other islands too. Different islands have different cultures and traditions and have their own way of living life. For the author's assumption to be true, the culture of all the islands must be similar which may not be possible due to several circumstances such as geography, tradition, and belief. Etc.
Are the Majority of children on the island of Tertia Interviewed? For the observation-centered method to be accurate in drawing the conclusion, the majority of the children on the Tertia have to be interviewed. The behavior of children within the Tertia may markedly vary, some may spend the most time talking about their biological parents whereas some may spend most of the time talking about other adults in the village. If the majority of the children are interviewed, then only the accuracy of the observation can be confirmed.
Is Time spent with children enough to know that they spend most of the time talking about their biological parents? Interviewing the children for a limited time may not figure out an efficacious conclusion regarding the behavior of children. To confirm that the children spend most of the time talking about their biological parents, one has to spend enough time interviewing with children.
The statement that the interview-centered method of understanding child-rearing culture, as it stands now, is flawed. The evidence given in the article are not enough to draw a conclusion. The three questions must be properly answered to prove that the statement holds true.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1840 1500
No. of Different Words: 149 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.055 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.071 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.059 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.591 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 526, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a clear way" with adverb for "clear"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ing three questions have to be answered in a clear way. Is the Island of Tertia similar to ot...
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Line 2, column 313, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e their own way of living life. For the authors assumption to be true, the culture of a...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le are not enough to draw a conclusion. The three questions must be properly answer...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, regarding, so, then, whereas, as to, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 364.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16208791209 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13190066496 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412087912088 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4981462846 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.529411765 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4117647059 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259190468708 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989339120487 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783768728694 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147656977195 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798764238597 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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