"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
In the article written by Dr. Karp he claims that the conclusion made by Dr. Field regarding the children in Tertia are fallacious. Dr. Karp tells that the children in Tertia are not reared by the adults in the village but rather are reared by parents of the children. Dr. Karp comes to this conclusion based on his interaction with the children in the islands that include Tertia. But this assertion made by Dr. Karp is rife with the following assumptions.
Firstly, Dr. Karp argues that the studies of Dr. Field on the rearing of Tertian children and his observation-centered approach is Completely wrong. Dr. Karp here assumes that the Sociological and living Conditions on the island were same as 20 years ago. Perhaps, there might have been a incident in which missing of a child was linked with the culture of rearing by the village , Which has significantly impacted all the people in the village and created mistrust among them which led to children being reared more by parents. It is also possible that there have been influence from a group of new inhabitants on the island that led to this change. If any of the above examples comes out to be true, then the authors assertion about Dr. Field and his observation -centered approach weakens even though there might have been a change in the rearing of the Tertian children.
Secondly, There is not a whole lot of information about whom Dr. Karp has interviewed , The article just states that He interacted with the children on islands that include Tertia. There is a possibility that Dr. Karp did not actually interview the children of Tertian village. Even if Dr. Karp has interviewed the children of Tertian Village, It might be possible that most of the questions in Interview were something that were related to the parents of the children. If any of the above examples hold merit, Then authors study is prone to be fallacious. The conclusions made by Dr.Karp might be true, But it is not possible to evaluate that until we have some clear evidence.
Finally, The author assumes that the Interview centered approach that he followed is certain to give more accurate understanding of the rearing traditions in other island cultures as well. Perhaps, It might be possible that the people in other islands are not enthusiastic about this certain interview and they may just not allow them on the island or give some vague answers to avoid the team of Dr.Karp because they are not comfortable about their culture being known by others. There is also a possibility that some of the islands are completely isolated from the current human culture and they do not want to embrace humans. If this is the case , then the authors statement of producing accurate results on other islands is certainly weakened.
In Conclusion, the argument as it stands now is flawed. However, If the author can provide more evidence which supports the current argument of the author, It will be helpful to evaluate these claims which as of now stand unwarranted.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 74, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...e studies of Dr. Field on the rearing of Tertian children and his observation-cen...
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Line 2, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...assumes that the Sociological and living Conditions on the island were same as 20...
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Line 2, column 290, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ars ago. Perhaps, there might have been a incident in which missing of a child wa...
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Line 2, column 382, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...th the culture of rearing by the village , Which has significantly impacted all th...
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Line 2, column 598, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...here have been influence from a group of new inhabitants on the island that led t...
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Line 2, column 675, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'examples'' or 'example's'?
Suggestion: examples'; example's
...led to this change. If any of the above examples comes out to be true, then the authors ...
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Line 2, column 715, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...examples comes out to be true, then the authors assertion about Dr. Field and his obser...
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Message: Use simply 'lot'.
Suggestion: lot
...an children. Secondly, There is not a whole lot of information about whom Dr. Karp has ...
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...tion about whom Dr. Karp has interviewed , The article just states that He interac...
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Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...he children of Tertian village. Even if Dr. Karp has interviewed the children of...
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Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
... fallacious. The conclusions made by Dr.Karp might be true, But it is not possible t...
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Line 4, column 156, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... understanding of the rearing traditions in other island cultures as well. Perhap...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
...e vague answers to avoid the team of Dr.Karp because they are not comfortable about ...
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Line 4, column 516, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...thers. There is also a possibility that some of the islands are completely isolated from th...
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Line 4, column 650, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t to embrace humans. If this is the case , then the authors statement of producing...
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Line 4, column 662, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... humans. If this is the case , then the authors statement of producing accurate results...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2490.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 514.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84435797665 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66027984316 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396887159533 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 760.5 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.503718894 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.5 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260751726896 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959433570872 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766638439567 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147055314957 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0951220654716 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 74, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e studies of Dr. Field on the rearing of Tertian children and his observation-cen...
^^
Line 2, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...assumes that the Sociological and living Conditions on the island were same as 20...
^^
Line 2, column 290, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ars ago. Perhaps, there might have been a incident in which missing of a child wa...
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Line 2, column 382, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...th the culture of rearing by the village , Which has significantly impacted all th...
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Line 2, column 598, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...here have been influence from a group of new inhabitants on the island that led t...
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Line 2, column 675, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'examples'' or 'example's'?
Suggestion: examples'; example's
...led to this change. If any of the above examples comes out to be true, then the authors ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 715, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...examples comes out to be true, then the authors assertion about Dr. Field and his obser...
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Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: WHOLE_LOT[1]
Message: Use simply 'lot'.
Suggestion: lot
...an children. Secondly, There is not a whole lot of information about whom Dr. Karp has ...
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Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tion about whom Dr. Karp has interviewed , The article just states that He interac...
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Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he children of Tertian village. Even if Dr. Karp has interviewed the children of...
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Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
... fallacious. The conclusions made by Dr.Karp might be true, But it is not possible t...
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Line 4, column 156, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... understanding of the rearing traditions in other island cultures as well. Perhap...
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Line 4, column 402, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
...e vague answers to avoid the team of Dr.Karp because they are not comfortable about ...
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Line 4, column 516, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...thers. There is also a possibility that some of the islands are completely isolated from th...
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Line 4, column 650, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t to embrace humans. If this is the case , then the authors statement of producing...
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Line 4, column 662, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... humans. If this is the case , then the authors statement of producing accurate results...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2490.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 514.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84435797665 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66027984316 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396887159533 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 760.5 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.503718894 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.5 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260751726896 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959433570872 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766638439567 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147055314957 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0951220654716 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.