Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
With the rapid growth of innovations, its influence is imperative in every fields. In fact, there is no denying that it has been touching every day life of an individuals, society and educational institutions, to name a few. In the given prompt, it is claimed that though, innovations such as videos, computer and internet seem, in some way, to improve the teaching methodology, for the most part, distract from real learning. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with this assertion and argue that with the right use of innovations, students and schools can surely benefit to a greater extent for three reasons.
To begin, the use of videos and internet for a pedagogical purpose can help the teachers to illustrate some complex ideas, which otherwise would have been difficult to visualize, to the students. Use of such interactive materials can bolster one’s cognition to get more engaged in the content. For instance, the concept of planets revolving around the sun is an elusive one when viewed relative to our position on planet. Even our most sage ancestors were deceived by this concept. But with the use of the animation showing the planets revolving around the sun and how we perceive the other way, it can be easily seen this counter intuitive concept is relatively an easy one. This example illustrates that the concepts which requiring ‘seeing is believing’ are more easily demonstrated through the use of visuals.
Further, the use of internet has made valuable learning resources accessible to everyone in every corner of the world. One can remotely learn the theory, attend the lectures if he/she has an access to internet. Most of these are open resource. For instance, MIT OCW (Open Courseware) is an open lecture, notes, assignments, a high-quality educational material from one of the top universities of the world is free and accessible to everyone. Many other schools can adapt the methodology of these contents and use it for better learning of the students. Likewise, You Tube had some of the best educational contents in the world and anyone willing to learn can get the knowledge from it. It wouldn’t have been possible in the pre-internet era. We are no more limited in the resources and the quality, we just need a right mind to search for it.
Of course, some argue that these technologies too often distract for real learning, which might be the case in an unsupervised environment for an student. Learning takes an effort of a mind, and human beings tends to avoid this effort and internet has also lots of distraction. Therefore, a students must be supervised during learning. Thus, with this ever-burgeoning use of technology it is crucial to use them in a right way, transforming local into global exposure, exchanging the knowledge and discovering new ways for improving the learning and teaching experience in the schools.
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- Although innovations such as video computers and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students these technologies all too often distract from real learning Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree 79
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you t 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
... it has been touching every day life of an individuals, society and educational institutions, ...
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Line 1, column 428, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...most part, distract from real learning. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with this...
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Line 3, column 744, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...at the concepts which requiring ‘seeing is believing’ are more easily demonstrated through t...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...eory, attend the lectures if he/she has an access to internet. Most of these are open res...
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Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...case in an unsupervised environment for an student. Learning takes an effort of a ...
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Line 7, column 290, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...as also lots of distraction. Therefore, a students must be supervised during learning. Thu...
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Line 7, column 413, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...of technology it is crucial to use them in a right way, transforming local into global exposur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, likewise, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in fact, of course, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03361344538 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8762982442 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518907563025 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 756.9 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0304949269 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.909090909 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6363636364 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214513476477 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586276623167 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608338094388 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13006642526 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042826900201 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.