The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The issue in question presents is with a contentious view that instilling in the young a sense of coorporation and not competition is the 'best' way to prepare them for leadership positions, whther in the government or the industries. The issue presents a matter that is very relevant to today's world in which competent leaders are needed to take the world in the right direction, but the extreme view of the author of the issue in stating that only coorporation is the best quality makes this issue difficult to agree with and so this issue must be deeply analysed.
To begin with, coorporation indeed instills in people a sense of team work, the ability to work with other people. In the real world nobody can work in isolation and people often have to collaborate together, whether in order to carry out research, implement a public policy, organise an event or lead a multinational company. Thus, the ability to coorporate with other people in order to achieve a common goal is extremely necessary for a professional career. On the other hand it may be argued that if people are too competitive, it may give them a self serving attitude, due to which they put their needs before the needs of their nation, their organisation, or their cause. Certainly, such a selfish attitude does not, in any way, guarentee the success or the betterment of the society. In such a scenario, coorporation does seem to have an upper hand over competition.
While I do concede to the above points, it is imperative to expatiate on the counter arguments. Firstly, competition pushes people to do better and enhances their capabilities. It is often asserted in economics and business how the competition between firms forces them to make better products at lower costs, making them more efficient. In such a scenario people properly husband their resources, plan out exactly what action must be taken and make an efficient team, which ultimately benefits the society in terms of low cost and efficient products. Secondly, competition can't be avoided in the real world. Different firms often compete in the market, for a greater market share, for tenders and profits, and so do employees in the same firm or organisation, for promotions and accolades. Just as animals compete with each other for territory, hegemony, or mates, similarly, it is human nature to compete with each other. Thus, competition is unavoidable and a healthy competition among organisations, or individuals pushes them to achieve more which in turn benefits their organisations and society.
Moreover, the author of the issue fails to consider that competition also entails coorporation, since both the concenpts are mutually exclusive of one another. Often, when people work in team in firms and organisations, they have to coorporate with each other in order to achieve their target. Thus, values of teamwork, and the ability to listen to other peoples opinions have to be developed when the competition is within teams. For example, often in schools, children are dividing into different houses and made to compete with one another in games, sports, wall paintings, etc., in order to instill a sense of coorporation in them.
In conclusion, while it can be argued that coorporation is a noble quality which must be instilled in people, might have some positive points, to say that coorporation trumps competition when in comes to producing leaders can't be agreed with. Often, competition can't be avioded and is necessary in order to make people or companies more efficient. Moreover, the values of coorporation can also be instilled through competition.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
...tion when in comes to producing leaders cant be agreed with. Often, competition cant...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...cant be agreed with. Often, competition cant be avioded and is necessary in order to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 97.0 58.6224719101 165% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3028.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 596.0 442.535393258 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08053691275 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94096258147 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89772241414 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464765100671 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 960.3 704.065955056 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7563705255 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.652173913 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9130434783 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91304347826 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211596511043 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647291232922 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684812821345 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121289574499 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037024381769 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 11.8971910112 231% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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