The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The issue is claiming that an important factor in the preparation of young people for the leadership in the future is to create a sense of cooperation, rather than competition in them. Having a sense of cooperation among human species is vital to thrive, which makes them work together, brainstorm new ideas, which finally brings about a lot of innovations. I agree with the claim that cooperation is better than the competition, but having a sense of competition can, in some cases, be helpful in the development of mankind.
Acting cooperatively is somehow intrinsic in many kinds of animals, including human beings. Ants living in a colony, help each other in many states of their life such as finding food, building nest, etc. Ants fall apart to search for food separately. When one of them finds a piece of food, it returns to the nest leaving a kind of liquid behind, which helps other ants of its kind in the colony to trace the liquid and find the food; therefore, they bring the food back to the nest. In this cooperation, although each part of society acts separately to find the food, they cannot benefit if they don't collaborate to carry the food.
Moreover, human beings in contemporary work together in the shape of a company. Consider the Microsoft corporation, which is an example of one of the most successful companies nowadays. It includes many parts, such as software engineering, hardware design, Artificial intelligence lab, etc, each of which contains many professional experts experimenting together to invent new ideas so that the whole company can make a profit from these innovations. Clearly, without an efficient collaboration among these parts of Microsoft, it would be impossible for it to reach its apex.
On the other hand, competition can be helpful in some situations, Let us elucidate how. Take the Microsoft corporation again. Why is it endeavoring to progress if it can make income by its simple innovative devices and software? It's because of Apple company. From a long time ago, when Steve Jobs and Bill Gates established these two companies until now, they have been two of the most famous rivals. When Microsoft proposed its first personal computer, Apple presents the first Macintosh. This rivalry continues to contemporary, causing so much magnificent progress in the field of Computer Science and Artificial intelligence.
In conclusion, having a sense of cooperation among people is vital to reach an important target of society. But competition
can give meaning to the concept of cooperation. Although it is intrinsic in human species to collaborate, having a sense of rivalry is another intrinsic part of man-kind, leading him in a way to become better than others in its kind.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2300.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 452.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08849557522 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9115952053 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533185840708 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1643599442 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.545454545 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191399536165 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511235396372 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636567985887 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930222668538 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552474020791 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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