Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The choice of one's college major is not a trivial one. In fact, it is not uncommon for students to ruminate on the decision of their field of study for months or perhaps for years, and nevertheless they regret about their chosen field at some point in the future bacause of the bad job market facing upon graduates. The prompt recommonds that educational institues works as a powerful advisor for students to abviate this morose situation. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this suggestion and argue that educational institutions should less involve into it with two reasons.
To begin, the job market is ever-shifting so it looks impossible to gurantee the sucess of any sepecific field in the unpredicable future. For instance, in the beginning of the 2000s, in Korea, business administration is the most aspired field among university-entering students becuase many of businesses has a surfeit of demand. The phenomenon make students in business area find high-paying jobs more easily than other students in a different field. However, after the 2010, the computer scient field burgeoned and soon fields such as computer engineering, data science, and AI took over the same role. among students, it is common to hear that business administration is the worst choice when it comes to their job prospect. The above example illustrates that the job market is highly contingent upon ever-chaning future which is not easy to predict their future success. For educational institutions to dissuade students in a specific field in terms of success is a short-term perspective and nobody can tell us that it will in this world.
Further, students should pursue their interests and passions rather than chasing current prospects to suceed in the future. Research has consistently demonstrated that our happiness level plays a crucial role in how effectively we work. In other words, a worker who is satisfied with their career and field not onley work faster but produce higher quality products and services as well. If a student want to suceed in thier field of study, they should do their work in the higest productivity, it will certainly make them excel in it. Only when students find themselve satisfactions in the field, they can be closer to their succeed with the highest level of work.
Of course, some argue that such a educational institutions' dissuation raise the possibility of students' success in the future, but it is a narrow perspective and institutions rather work as a educational system maker to encourage students to find their real interests in a balance position. People who are not candid in their inner voice is never easy to achive what they expect.
- Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student s field of study Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure t 50
- Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and sup 66
- Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student s field of study Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position 50
- Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student s field of study Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure t 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
The choice of ones college major is not a trivial one. In ...
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Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...rtheless they regret about their chosen field at some point in the future bacause of...
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Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ess they regret about their chosen field at some point in the future bacause of t...
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Line 2, column 607, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Among
...cience, and AI took over the same role. among students, it is common to hear that bus...
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Line 4, column 33, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...work. Of course, some argue that such a educational institutions dissuation rai...
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Line 4, column 47, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'institution'?
Suggestion: institution
...rse, some argue that such a educational institutions dissuation raise the possibility of stu...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...pective and institutions rather work as a educational system maker to encourage s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, well, for instance, in fact, of course, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 441.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07256235828 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90142943901 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53514739229 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7982341718 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.277777778 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180117879376 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552860899732 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384315374141 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112687395116 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184527510347 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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