The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individual
The prosperity of a nation is largely dependent on the people of the country. If the people are strong and independent they can effectively contribute to the advancement of the country. Now, the question is how do the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life impacting the denizens of the country. Here I am not in the favor of the statement that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals for some reasons and I am going to explain the reasons below.
First of all, we have to understand what are the factors working behind to build strong and independent individuals. If people have the ability to take the right decision and shape their life in such a way so that they can effectively contribute to the peace and development of the country, they can be considered as strong and independent. That’s why, people should be provided with enough facilities such as advanced education, technology, transportation and medical services. That means luxuries and conveniences are helping people to become more strong and independent. For example, today’s medical treatment has been advanced a lot. As a result, the average living year has been increased and people are less affected by germs because of their healthy life-style. Hence, it can be said that these conveniences are helpful to develop strong and independent individuals.
Secondly, Advancement of technology completely changed the communication system. People can attend in important meetings live with the help of internet. Again, people are also regularly attending in their offices that are hundred miles away from their houses. That means people are having wider chances to work and become economically secured. Consequently, they can lead a standard life. So, it is lucid that once a personal computer or a car which were considered as luxuries now became inseparable parts of day to day life.
Furthermore, egalitarian access to the national and international information via facebook, youtube people are now more able to protest any unfair movement occurring nationally or globally and secure human rights. For example, in North Korea people are suffering from dictatorship. In addition of, women are not getting their basic rights in Saudi Arabia. But, through the improved social media worldwide people came to know about the unjust and they protested against these unjust actions. As a result, USA, UK and many other countries are now working to secure the human rights of these deprived people. This phenomenon indicates that luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are initiating the path to become a strong and independent individuals.
In conclusion, it is completely unambiguous that the luxuries and conveniences are not the impediment in the path of becoming a strong and independent individuals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...rly attending in their offices that are hundred miles away from their houses. That mean...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...ple are suffering from dictatorship. In addition of, women are not getting their basic ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ering from dictatorship. In addition of, women are not getting their basic rights...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2442.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 454.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37885462555 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06624385603 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497797356828 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.5344822377 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.75 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.444161815161 0.243740707755 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112513591114 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120396490705 0.0758088955206 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254518814729 0.150359130593 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145263977807 0.0667264976115 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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