A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
In the preceding statement, the author claims that the national curriculum of the whole nation should be the same for all of its students until they enter the college. Unequivocally, it is a good policy to provide a distinct type of education to the students of the nation. Neverthless, this educational scheme of providing an education without any disparity can reduce the opportunity to gain the knowledge outside the particular curiculum. Though, the author's claim may have a well merit, he fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which the argument can be strengthen.
To begin, each and every student is having their own area of interests and capability to learn something. I would like to point out that students should be aware of the latest technology and concepts happening around the world. To illustrate that, let us have look at an example by comparing school facilities of public schools and private schools. In private schools, most of the students are coming from an upper class families and they have all the things to survive like smartphones, laptops, etc,. While students who are facing financial problems mostly chooses a public school to educate them selves. Due to the financial problems, they sometimes are not able to do projects which costs them more. According to same national curriculum, these students fail to pass these type of project oriented exams.
Admittedly, What if student want to study the subjects which are outside their curriculum? In this circumstances, student just lose his chance to pursue the career in his choice of subject. By this way the argument loses its meaning.
In the conclusion, the author should consider these aspect to bolster his viwe.
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... conclusion, the author should consider these aspect to bolster his viwe.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 283.0 442.535393258 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08480565371 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71343122011 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614840989399 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 704.065955056 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4486603045 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.9333333333 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8666666667 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314911586806 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967277943885 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135030331795 0.0758088955206 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155930110307 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0918424189246 0.0667264976115 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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