Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Wildlife is an essential and important aspect of a nation. A nation’s wildlife can tell us a lot about the history, culture and the attitude of the nation towards animals. Preserving the remaining wilderness available to the nation in their natural state is not only essential to the surviving species of animals but also it can be beneficial to the country itself. I, therefore, agree that enforcements on preserving the remaining wilderness should be passed for the following reasons.
Wildlife is not something a person gets to see in their daily lives. It is considered as an exotic viewing experience by many. What if a nation could preserve the wilderness and use it for the economic gain? For example, in South Africa, Kruger national park is an open safari destination for animal lovers. The state has preserved the national wilderness as it is and instead built tourist guesthouses and set up different safari companies on the extreme outskirts of the park. By this, the animals are not at all restricted in a cage but instead left to wander in the open and free land. Along with this, the rangers can conduct safaris for the tourists who wish to see these animals in their natural habitat. From the above example, we can see that harmony can be established between wildlife and the economic gain for a country.
Every species in the world is interdependent on one another in some way or the other. Like humans are dependent on plants and animals for our food. Similarly, animals are also dependent plants and other animals for their food. This forms the basis of a food chain. However, this food chain is only applicable when the habitat is where its supposed to be. Consider this, by disrupting a natural wilderness, we are rescinding the animals from their homes, forcing them to a different habitat and at the same time disrupting the very food chain that is essential for their survival. For example, if we destroy the natural vegetation which is a primary food source for cows and many other herbivorous animals, this causes a chain reaction that leads to the reduction in their population. Once their population goes down, many carnivorous animals who are dependent on these animals for food will be devoid of food and as a result, will be considered as endangered. From the above example, it is quite clear that disrupting the natural wilderness leads to the endangering of species.
Of course, the economy is also an essential part of a nation’s growth. But what is the use of this economy if the gain is received by destroying the natural beauty of mother earth. It is therefore in the best interest of the nation that a strict law is enforced in preserving the remaining wilderness in their natural state and at the same time develop ways for the economy by not disrupting the habitat of the animals and instead living in harmony with them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, for example, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2375.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81744421907 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68317055652 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436105476673 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7716272249 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9583333333 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5416666667 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54166666667 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316111313404 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944383734211 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898197019165 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217893273932 0.150359130593 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587169812613 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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