Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Research claims that loss of natural resources cause imbalance in our environment because a small change in nature's cycle may have detrimental consequences. The prompt suggests a solution that all remaining wildlife and resources should be preserved irrespective of economic gain. I mostly agree with the suggestion for three reasons. However, I do concede that in some extreme cases, wilderness may be compromised.
First of all, studies have revealed that large portion of nature and wildlife is still unexplored. This shows that many aspects are still hidden under nature and many remedies and treasures are yet to be known. Hence lack of preservation of nature may lead to loss of these treasures which could be beneficial to solve various problems. For example, perhaps some wild plants are effective to cure fatal disease or nerve disorder or cancer. Scientists are conducting reckless research to find these cures. We may loose the cure because of loss of natural resources due to lack of measures from society. Hence, preservation of forests and wildlife will be beneficial for society in long term.
Secondly, preservation of wildlife will in turn support economic growth of nation. For instance, Panda in China, African elephants in African region or polar bears in Alaska. They are found in specific region of our planet. Supporting their survival will attract tourist, scientists from around the world to that region. As a result, tourism and other systems to support tourism like hotels, resorts, transports etc. will also flourish. This will contribute in economic growth of the nation.
Thirdly, survival of wildlife requires special food, ecosystem and support which needs efforts from government. Lack of funding from government makes maintenance and preservation of these plants and species and causes their extinction. Therefore, measures are necessary now to take care of remaining reserve left with us. Further, due to increasing demand of wood, paper by humans, forests are diminishing at faster rate. Data shows that Amazon rain forest has been reduced by 17% of its overall size. These data alerts us to initiate actions to take remedial steps for preservation.
However, I do concede that in a few cases when society is facing more pressing problems, then human issues should be given preference. For example, in case of urgent need of health care system like situation of Covid-19, global efforts and funding should be diverted to solve the problem faced by humanity. Research to develop vaccine requires huge financial aid and resources. Thus situations when human population is at risk, efforts are necessary to resolve the most immediate problem.
Overall, I agree with the prompt to initiate measures to support preservation of remaining wilderness. Preservation of nature is directly or indirectly beneficial to mankind for the reasons explained above. However I do concede that in certain situation of urgency, need of society should be addressed first
- Although innovations such as video computers and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students these technologies all too often distract from real learning Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree 54
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- People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making 16
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- Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state even if these areas could be developed for economic gain 54
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...dies and treasures are yet to be known. Hence lack of preservation of nature may lead...
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...ss research to find these cures. We may loose the cure because of loss of natural res...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...uires huge financial aid and resources. Thus situations when human population is at ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ankind for the reasons explained above. However I do concede that in certain situation ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, for example, for instance, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2528.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35593220339 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74618117757 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540254237288 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 787.5 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.301433944 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.5483870968 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2258064516 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25806451613 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242055167916 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553566423253 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490035881375 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119410849085 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420320280875 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 100.480337079 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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