People's attitudes are determined more by their immidiate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole.
Human are integral part of a society. In turn, social circumstances significantly influences human behavior. The prompt also suggests in other direction that an individual’s behavior is not determined by external social factors but by immediate situations. I mostly disagree with the prompt due to two reasons which I will explain below. However, I do concede that there are extreme cases which shows that decisions are shaped by internal nature.
First of all, society plays a role to shape our performance. History serves us many such examples. In past, society’s view towards women were very conservative. Hence, their role was also limited to selected sectors only. Majorly, women were involved in household activities. However, with change in time and perspective, role of women changed dramatically. Given the opportunity, they are now participating in field of sports to science to business to space. Women like Ms. Indra Nooyi, CEO of Pepsico company or Ms. Sunita Williams, well known Space researcher from NASA have proven their mettle in many conventional and unconventional sectors. This clearly shows that with change in attitude, women are presented with varied opportunities which were definitely limited in earlier time.
Moreover, Influence of social media is a well known to us. Young adults get easily influenced by the images and reports published in online platforms. As a result of this, many times they feel inferior and demotivated. Reports suggest that depression is emerging as one of the major issue in children and teens. Cosmetic industries are expanding exponentially due to increasing demand from youth. Another instance of social media influence is US Presidential election of year 2016. Post election, many reports surfaced which claimed that social media was used as mean to influence voters opinion. Plenty of cases prove that external factors hugely impact one’s decision.
However, I do concede that there exists few extreme cases which shows the dominance of internal trails over individual’s personality. For instance, Adolf Hitler. Hitler was not the only one who had difficult childhood. But his obsession with power and selfish motive hugely damaged Germany. On the other hand, Mahatma Gandhi, who laid the foundation of Indian Independence movement stood formidably against British government. Clearly, Gandhi ji’s opinion was not common opinion of society rather he influenced the masses and people venerated him. These personalities are cogent case of inherent trait’s dominance.
Overall, I mostly disagree with the prompt and agree that external situations and factors influence our behavior greatly. Examples of women’s role in earlier society and social media in present time shows this effectively. However, extreme personalities do exist such as Adolf Hitler and Gandhi ji who were unconventional in their choices.
- In this age of intensive media coverage it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero 50
- Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve 62
- Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state even if these areas could be developed for economic gain 54
- People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making 16
- It is primarily in cities that a nation s cultural traditions are generated and preserved 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'In the past'?
Suggestion: In the past
.... History serves us many such examples. In past, society’s view towards women were very...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2450.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54298642534 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88798401479 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58371040724 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8187712659 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.5625 118.986275619 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8125 23.4991977007 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.90625 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0634929063996 0.243740707755 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0141117662806 0.0831039109588 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0236294374934 0.0758088955206 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0373801323106 0.150359130593 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270124270351 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 48.8420337079 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.26 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 100.480337079 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.8971910112 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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