Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The recommendation presents a view that I would agree is successful most of the time. Young people usually like to get famous immediately, but they should be encouraged to set up realistic goals because it is important for young individuals to have long-term educational plans to have good jobs and consequently good lives in the future.
Long-term goals can be frustrating sometimes; however, the consequence will be worthy. For example, a young girl who wants to be a dietitian should study for four years to get a clinical nutrition bachelor. In addition, she should pass a ten months dietetic internship and the registered dietitian exam after that. She should study hard to reach her dreams, but she will become a RD even if the educational path was not that fun for her.
Additionally, young people are passionate about vacations that is not good all the times because they need to save money for unexpected expenses too. Imagine a same RD girl who has a fulltime job; however, she goes to expensive travels with her friends every year. As a result, she is going to have money problems soon. Instead of spending unnecessary money, she can save money to make sure that she can be an independent individual in her life that is more important than having entertainment.
In contrast to the statement, most young individuals believe that they only born one time, so they should enjoy their moments; however, most of the time fame and recognition come quickly and disappear quickly too. For instance, consider a young girl who likes to get famous among her friends by going to parties and dancing on the floor. As a result, she might get happy which is a good entertainment for her and her friends but not a realistic goal. Whatever the reason behind the behavior, the key factor is that short-term goals are not beneficial for young individuals because quick entertainment can hinder reaching realistic goals
In conclusion, immediate recognition is every young individual’s dream, but to make improvements in their lives it is important to have long-term goals to become successful persons one day.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment can hinder reaching realistic goals In conclusion, immediate recognition is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 353.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97733711048 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87367762566 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515580736544 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.9663573369 60.3974514979 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.5 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2142857143 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 5.21951772744 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217642087446 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750734195906 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550616761964 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131151414806 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457769464394 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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