The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the changes of the population aged 65 and over. This graph provides the data from 1940 to 2040 in three different countries, such as USA, Sweden, and Japan. Overall the movement of this population was increased.

In 1940, USA is the biggest proportion of ages it started almost 10 percent of them, however, Sweden and Japan were much different and lower amounted of USA. Throughout 20 years, USA and Sweden population were increased slightly, meanwhile, Japan was dropped to below 5 percent of 65 and overpopulation. In 1980 to 2000, Japan ages society remained steadily and sharply went up to 5 percent. On the other hand, USA and Sweden populated were deducted to lower than 15 percent.

After 2000, Japan older community rocketed until it reached a peak of more than 25 percent for Japan and for Sweden fluctuated a bit and gain maximum population in 25 percent. USA is the least populated people aged 65 and over, they reach 22.5 percent in 2040.

In summary, three of those following countries are increases on 2040, but the biggest is Japan. In the future, Japan will have a lot of older people because they feel safe to live in Jap

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'remained'.
Suggestion: remained
...In 1980 to 2000, Japan ages society was remain stadily and more little bit up the amou...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ges society was remain stadily and more little bit up the amount. On the other hand, USA a...
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Line 5, column 35, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...t. After 2000, Japan older community were rocket until reach at the peak of more ...
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Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'rocketed'.
Suggestion: rocketed
... After 2000, Japan older community were rocket until reach at the peak of more than 25...
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Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...percent in 2040. In summary, all the countries population were gain and the biggest am...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while, in summary, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 976.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 206.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73786407767 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38202651845 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538834951456 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 296.1 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.889407724 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7272727273 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7272727273 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171984752776 0.215688989381 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087506768684 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764038818602 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124050619615 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924072203042 0.0819641961636 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.2329268293 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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