The aging population is good for business, the economy and society. Others disagree.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
While some might argue that the elderly play an integral part in the improvement of business, the economy and society, I hold the opinion that they can have an adverse effect on a country, rather than beneficial.
Granted, some people may have compelling reasons to stay optimistic about a graying population. First and foremost, hands-on experience of senior citizens is a valuable asset to economic and social development. Indeed, with their unrivaled experience and knowledge, elderly people can work as advisers in some companies, assisting businesses function more efficiently. Similarly, they may enter politics to become senators or representatives to make contributions to the betterment of the economy and society. Another advantage is that old people can back up the younger generation in their career. To illustrate, some grandparents nowadays may stay at home and take care of the children so that their parents can pay more attention to their career.
On the other hand, I believe that aging population can have some serious drawbacks which may overshadow those merits. Initially, it is irrefutable that the youth is the main workforce as they are more energetic, enthusiastic and dedicated. They are undeniably the future pillars of a country’s development. Therefore, a country with old people accounting for the majority, no matter how experienced they are, can hardly improve its economy. In addition, a graying population means more public money is allocated to their welfare service such as healthcare and pension while they are no longer in employment and do not create materials or resources for the society. This may put strain on the national budget, which already has to tackle other social issues such as unemployment or crime.
In conclusion, while many may think that business, economy and society can benefit from an aging population, I am more convinced of the detrimental impacts caused by this trend.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...yment or crime. In conclusion, while many may think that business, economy and societ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, may, similarly, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33550488599 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96186329739 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589576547231 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7207950129 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0998256273013 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319220654727 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349728665196 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0648647522761 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283332446982 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...yment or crime. In conclusion, while many may think that business, economy and societ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, may, similarly, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33550488599 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96186329739 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589576547231 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7207950129 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0998256273013 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319220654727 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349728665196 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0648647522761 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283332446982 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.