The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices is harmful to individuals and to the society they live in. To what extent do you agree and disagree?
In the modern day, technological development is an indispensable part of daily life and people have different views about whether video games on portable devices are really necessary for individuals or not. Although modern technological devices are able to satisfy human needs, it seems to be fraught with pitfalls.
On the one hand, the appearance of technological items brings about broad-based benefits in various aspects. Firstly, due to the bustle and hustle of daily life, it is undeniable that the satisfaction of entertainment is extremely necessary after a stressful day at work or study. Furthermore, video games on such portable devices as smartphones or tablets allow people to let their hair down at anywhere due to its convenience. Secondly, a whole host of mobile games creates global communities that allow people who possess the same interest to interact with each other in online platforms. For example, such trendy games as PUG and League Of Legends offer not only a lively interaction but also value competitions, thus connecting a million players around the world.
On the other hand, despite of various advantages from video games on portable devices, it may do more harm than good due to negative impacts. In fact, it is attributable to the fact that an over reliance on mobile games would render various drawbacks for youngsters, especially children at the school ages. For instance, various teenagers these day spend a significant amount of time to play games and indulge in the virtual world, this may lead to not only a studying distraction but also a fall of educational achievements. In addition, since are addicted, people usually isolate themselves from their family and their friends and waste a considerable number of hours in their rooms. As a result, both shortage of face-to-face communication and less physical activities may act as main factors to the scarcity of social skills and such various diseases as the weakness eyes or obesity
In conclusion, although portable devices can bring about broad-based advantages to individuals, a whole host of negative impacts from technological addiction is unavoidable. People should have an appropriate amount of time to make use of this kind of modern devices.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this day' or 'these days'?
Suggestion: this day; these days
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...al activities may act as main factors to the scarcity of social skills and such v...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ake use of this kind of modern devices.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24166666667 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00631921906 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572222222222 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.7308445611 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.153846154 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6923076923 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.4615384615 7.06120827912 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13900516949 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475370210925 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438598963719 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.079485132043 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364409828903 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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