It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional culture are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
It is a contentious argument that ancient civilizations will be put an end by the advancement of technology. A popular belief is that there is an incompatibility between customary culture and technology. However, I am convinced that the advent of automation is offering a huge backing to sustain the tradition.
Firstly, nowadays, individuals are able to preserve their cultures thanks to the advent and refinement of machinery that has facilitated us with a variety of innovatory machines and neoteric science. A good illustration of this is that the National Museum in Egypt has one of the most advanced secure systems in the world that ensures all the ancient selections there are in safe hands thanks to the contribution of cameras, entrance and exit routes which are built considering safety and security in mind. Accordingly, tradition and conventional items can be bolstered and are able to pass down through the next generations so that youngsters can inherit and learn them.
Moreover, humans can introduce and represent their local habits uniquely and sufficiently through fascinating imagery as well as magnificent scenery through cinematic programs displayed on television or on social media. To exemplify, Korean movies take on a crucial role in enhancing a number of tourists and flourishing country's tourism industry. Under that circumstances, culture worldwide can be aware and interested by other nationalities through the Internet.
Finally, technology has no contradicting effect on tradition sustainability since technology development can alter the way of manufacturing of customary items which earlier consumed much time as they were done manually. The emerge of new processing appliances help to achieve a variety of local cuisines and therefore, they are, in turn, participating in long-lasting receipt in a long-term perspective.
Taking everything into consideration, I would say that the advent of machinery has retain and back country's conventional culture because of innovative machines and contemporary in the field of science; in addition, enable communities to be proud of their tradition by presenting the way of life in their society through mass media.
It is a contentious argument that ancient civilizations will be put an end by the advancement of technology. A popular belief is that there is an incompatibility between customary culture and technology. However, I am convinced that the advent of automation is offering a huge backing to sustain the tradition.
Firstly, nowadays, individuals are able to preserve their cultures thanks to the advent and refinement of machinery that has facilitated us with a variety of innovatory machines and neoteric science. A good illustration of this is that the National Museum in Egypt has one of the most advanced secure systems in the world that ensures all the ancient selections there are in safe hands thanks to the contribution of cameras, entrance and exit routes which are built considering safety and security in mind. Accordingly, tradition and conventional items can be bolstered and are able to pass down through the next generations so that youngsters can inherit and learn them.
Moreover, humans can introduce and represent their local habits uniquely and sufficiently through fascinating imagery as well as magnificent scenery through cinematic programs displayed on television or on social media. To exemplify, Korean movies take on a crucial role in enhancing a number of tourists and flourishing country's tourism industry. Under that circumstances, culture worldwide can be aware and interested by other nationalities through the Internet.
Finally, technology has no contradicting effect on tradition sustainability since technology development can alter the way of manufacturing of customary items which earlier consumed much time as they were done manually. The emerge of new processing appliances help to achieve a variety of local cuisines and therefore, they are, in turn, participating in long-lasting receipt in a long-term perspective.
Taking everything into consideration, I would say that the advent of machinery has retain and back country's conventional culture because of innovative machines and contemporary in the field of science; in addition, enable communities to be proud of their tradition by presenting the way of life in their society through mass media.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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...d much time as they were done manually. The emerge of new processing appliances help to ac...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'retained'.
Suggestion: retained
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52380952381 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2750863311 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598214285714 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.9282527192 49.4020404114 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.666666667 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215866738219 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732936691549 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080249789937 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106683275972 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549329047778 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 50.2224549098 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.62 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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