Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level off sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Owing to this ultra modern epoch, the utilisation of the prepackaged food and beverages burgeoning day by day that leads the detrimental health issues among people thus, the cost of these products should be accelerated by the high commission . I will discuss it in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To commerce with the myriad of reasons are contributes in the favour of increasing the market rate of these sugary foods and drinks. First and foremost, due to the hetric schedule people in this era choose these canned foods that contain alots of preservatives which have plenty of calories. The intake of high calorie food become the main cause of obesity. To justify my state of mind there is an epitome,the prepackaged food have about 400 to 500 calories in each packet which is enough to incline the fat level in human body and also decline metabolism rate of the body . Secondly, the expert assert that consumption of these sugary products will lead the fetal health diseases such as diabetes , obesity among the population therefore government should take the initiative for dwindling the utilisation of these Tetra packed products.
I'm further addition, the administration should aware the masses about reducing the intake of the packaged food with distinct modes . For instance, the awarenesses campaign should be lead by the high authorities by using the digital media, Television commercials. Moreover, with the increment in the cost of these products also may influence the peeps to not consume the manufactured things . Lastly, in the schools the children should be encouraged to having the healthy and organic food and fresh juices rather than these canned food and Tetra packed drinks.
To conclude, the acceleration in the market rate of the prepackaged food products and public awareness can drop the utility of the sugary foods and drinks as well as ameliorate the health of the people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15533980583 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74535777818 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546925566343 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.0164771222 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.75 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22665844385 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080811624142 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403677821805 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144505837087 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0078963065749 0.056905535591 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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