Many young people to know about international pop and movie stars famous people in the history of their countries. What are the causes? Give solutions to increase the number of people to know about famous people in history.
History is one of the most important parts of every country's culture. However, these days, foreign stars in music and movies seem to be better known among teenagers than historical people in their country. There are some reasons for this issue and I would like to suggest some possible ways to make people know more about the countries historically famous people.
To commence with, this issue comes about as a result of the globalization in this day and age. With the advance of the media and technology, people are able to assess to the for encounter especially through music and films. Secondly, that international stars are more famous is because of people's need of relaxation. Teenagers tend to listen to music and watch movies in their free time as leisure activities. As the foreign music may have more catchy lyrics and foreign idols and stars may be good-looking, young people are easily attracted and try to find out more information. One more reason that contributes to this issue is the fact that national history is not attractive enough to get youngers' interest. Historical documents tend to be so lengthy and boring that they can only attract those who are truly and honestly interested in, not most people. That is a sad reality among teenagers these days.
For these reasons that are some possible actions that should be taken to improve the situation. Obviously we cannot force anyone to stop listening to their favorite singers' music or stop watching their favorite actors' films. What we should do is to find the ways to attract more people to historical values. There are some comics and cartoons that are created based on historic events. They are so attractive and appealing that they can raise people's interest in history. This is a good and creative method that should be kept going on. Another way is that the authorities can organize an annual competition about the ideas to make historical events more attractive that can be applied in education. By doing this we can keep historical values alive and better known day by day.
To conclude, knowing much about international stars is good in some ways, as their music and films help you to relax and sometimes give you the motivation to live better. However, no one should forget their own origin, their own country's history, and so do the teenagers. Admiring the foreign famous without ignoring our history is something that we should do in order to integrate without being assimilated.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 713, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Historical
...active enough to get youngers interest. historical documents tend to be so lengthy and bor...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...give you the motivation to live better. However no one should forget their own origin, ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, honestly, however, look, may, second, secondly, so, as to, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 417.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93045563549 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54577561749 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501199040767 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 652.5 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6025175542 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4545454545 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9545454545 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40909090909 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258755080766 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728603720662 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707316573958 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181838006725 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734609717312 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 713, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Historical
...active enough to get youngers interest. historical documents tend to be so lengthy and bor...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...give you the motivation to live better. However no one should forget their own origin, ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, honestly, however, look, may, second, secondly, so, as to, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 417.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93045563549 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54577561749 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501199040767 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 652.5 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6025175542 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4545454545 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9545454545 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40909090909 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258755080766 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728603720662 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707316573958 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181838006725 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734609717312 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.